Watch— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix vocabulary errors (watch/watch strap, formal events).

Exemplo: No, I don't usually wear a watch. I prefer checking the time on my smartphone because I find watches uncomfortable and unnecessary for my daily routine; however, I sometimes wear a watch for formal events.

Sugestão: Provide a complete, grammatically correct response with specific details. Use a clear topic sentence, then add supporting detail (what kind of watch, why you wear it, how often). Avoid incomplete sentences and wrong words (vouch -> watch).

Exemplo: Yes. My parents gave me a classic leather-strap watch for my graduation, and I wear it on special occasions because it reminds me of that milestone and matches formal outfits.

Sugestão: Correct word choice and expand slightly with concrete reasons. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons linked with linking words. Replace unclear words ('walls') with appropriate vocabulary like 'wealth' or 'status'.

Exemplo: Many people buy expensive watches because they serve as a status symbol and signal wealth; moreover, they can convey professionalism and help create a good impression at business meetings or social events.

Sugestão: Answer clearly and avoid minor grammatical errors. Provide a topic sentence and then two concise, linked reasons with examples. You can acknowledge a contrasting view briefly to show balance.

Exemplo: Personally, I don't think wearing a watch is essential because smartphones make it easy to check the time, and I find watches uncomfortable for everyday use; however, I can see why some people prefer them for style or convenience.

× No, I don't wear a watch, I prefer to check the time on my smartphone instead and because I find wearing a very uncomfortable and it feels unnecessary for my lifestyle.

✓ No, I don't wear a watch; I prefer to check the time on my smartphone because I find wearing one very uncomfortable and unnecessary for my lifestyle.

The sentence misuses adjectives and pronouns: 'wearing a very uncomfortable' is incorrect because 'wearing' needs an object and 'very uncomfortable' describes the object. Also the conjunctions and clause order are faulty. Correction inserts the object 'one' for the watch, moves 'very' to modify 'uncomfortable', removes the redundant 'and' before 'because', and uses a semicolon to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: include the object after 'wearing', place modifiers directly before the adjective, and avoid redundant conjunctions.

× Occasionally I wear a voucher for a formal events but most of the time my phone is enough.

✓ Occasionally I wear a watch for formal events, but most of the time my phone is enough.

The word 'voucher' is the wrong noun; context requires 'watch'. Also 'a formal events' mixes singular article with plural noun; change to 'for formal events' or 'for a formal event'. Add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and ensure article-number agreement with nouns.

× Yes, once I received a vouch as a graduation present from my parents.

✓ Yes, once I received a watch as a graduation present from my parents.

'Vouch' is a misspelling/incorrect noun; the intended word is 'watch'. Use the correct lexical item. Suggestion: proofread for word choice errors and replace with the correct noun.

× So I usually wear this watch because it feels.

✓ So I usually wear this watch because it feels comfortable.

The clause 'because it feels' is incomplete; 'feels' requires a complement (e.g., 'comfortable' or 'good'). Add an adjective to complete the clause. Suggestion: ensure subordinate clauses include required complements.

× Many people wear expensive watches because they are seen as a status symbol and a way to display walls.

✓ Many people wear expensive watches because they are seen as a status symbol and a way to display wealth.

The word 'walls' is a wrong lexical choice; context requires 'wealth'. Replace with the correct noun. Suggestion: verify word choice to match intended meaning.

× Others buy them to convey professionalism and make a good impression at business meetings or social events.

✓ Others buy them to convey professionalism and to make a good impression at business meetings or social events.

Parallel structure is improved by adding 'to' before the second verb 'make', ensuring both verbs are in parallel infinitive form. Suggestion: maintain parallelism in lists of verbs.

× No, I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch with smartphones.

✓ No, I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch when you have a smartphone.

The preposition 'with' is awkward here; 'when' or 'if' better expresses the condition. Also 'smartphones' plural vs singular 'a smartphone' should match general statement—use 'a smartphone' or 'having a smartphone'. Suggestion: use 'when you have' or 'if you have' to express the condition clearly.

× I can check the time easily and I find wearing a watch either uncomfortable or unnecessary for daily life.

✓ I can check the time easily, and I find wearing a watch either uncomfortable or unnecessary for daily life.

This sentence is largely correct grammatically; only punctuation needed: add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: use commas to join independent clauses with coordinating conjunctions.