Computers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用正确的时态和句式。例如，描述使用电脑的具体场景时，注意句子结构和连贯性。

Exemplo: I usually use a computer during classes and at work. For example, in class, I can view the PowerPoint on one side of the screen while taking notes on the other side.

Sugestão: 回答中时态使用不准确，句子结构混乱，建议使用过去时态并简化句子，避免重复和冗长。

Exemplo: The first time I used a computer was at a friend's house before I started primary school. My parents didn't buy me a computer because they didn't want me to play games, so I went to my friend's home to use one.

Sugestão: 回答表达不清晰，句子结构复杂且不连贯，建议简化表达，明确说明没有电脑对学习和工作的影响。

Exemplo: Without a computer, my study and work would be very inconvenient. Although I can use an iPad or phone, computers are better for handling complex tasks and documents.

Sugestão: 回答内容重复且不具体，建议明确说明遇到什么样的具体情况会觉得使用电脑困难，并用连词使句子更连贯。

Exemplo: It is difficult for me to use a computer when I face unfamiliar tasks that require a lot of trial and error. I prefer using iPads or iPhones because they are more user-friendly.

× Uh, well I will use the computer during my class or work.

✓ Uh, well I use the computer during my class or work.

这里描述的是习惯性动作，应该使用一般现在时，而不是将来时。

× For instance during the class H only one side of screen can show the PowerPoint, on the other side can taking notes which which.

✓ For instance, during the class, only one side of the screen can show the PowerPoint, and on the other side, you can take notes.

介词使用不当，缺少必要的冠词和连词，动词形式错误。应加逗号分隔句子，'taking'应改为动词原形'take'。

× Well the first time I use a computer was in a friend's home before I went to read in primary school because my parents don't want me play computer games so don't buy me computers.

✓ Well, the first time I used a computer was at a friend's home before I went to primary school because my parents didn't want me to play computer games, so they didn't buy me a computer.

描述过去事件，动词应使用过去时。'use'改为'used'，'don't want'改为'didn't want'，'play'前应加不定式'to'，'don't buy'改为'didn't buy'，'computers'改为单数形式'a computer'。

× So I will choose go to a friend's home to enjoy playing.

✓ So I chose to go to a friend's home to enjoy playing.

描述过去动作，动词时态应为过去时，'choose'改为'chose'，'go'前应加不定式'to'。

× Well, without computer it would cause inconvenience for my study and work compared with iPad and phones, even though it can process the documents primarily for the complex fields processing.

✓ Well, without a computer, it would cause inconvenience for my study and work compared with iPads and phones, even though they can process documents primarily for complex fields processing.

缺少冠词'a'，'computer'应为单数，'iPad and phones'应统一复数形式'iPads and phones'，'it'指代不明确，改为'they'，'the documents'改为'documents'。

× Well, it would be a tough task to use a computer when we face unfamiliar tasks that need a lot of trying.

✓ Well, it would be a tough task to use a computer when we face unfamiliar tasks that require a lot of trying.

动词搭配错误，'need'改为'require'更正式，且更符合语境。

× I like touching on the iPads or iPhones, trying on the computer, clicking on the computer.

✓ I like touching iPads or iPhones, trying using the computer, clicking on the computer.

'touching on'用法错误，'touch'后不加介词'on'，'trying on the computer'表达不清，改为'trying using the computer'更准确。