Computers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and structured. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, use 'computer' instead of 'computers' when referring generally. Also, clarify your points with linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Exemplo: I use a computer daily, especially at work in the hospital where I collect and store data. Additionally, I use it for practising English skills such as reading, writing, speaking, and listening.

Sugestão: Your answer needs clearer structure and correct tense usage. Start with a direct response, then add details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence clarity.

Exemplo: The first time I used a computer was when I started university. At that time, I didn't own a computer, so we used the university library where tutors and professors taught us how to use them.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use present tense consistently and organise your ideas logically with linking words. Be specific and avoid confusing phrases like 'alter cell phones with computers'.

Exemplo: Life without a computer would be very difficult for me. Unlike many people who prefer using cell phones, I rely on my computer for work and entertainment, such as watching movies and managing data at my job.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and completeness. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences. Also, avoid repetition and improve sentence structure.

Exemplo: It is difficult for me to use a computer when I am on vacation because I prefer to disconnect from work. Moreover, laptops are bulky and inconvenient to carry, which makes it harder to use them during holidays.

× Actually, I use my computers on a daily basis.

✓ Actually, I use my computer on a daily basis.

The word 'computers' is plural, but the context suggests the student is referring to a single personal device. Using the singular 'computer' is more appropriate here.

× Since I work in the hospital, I have to collect lots of data and store them in my computer.

✓ Since I work in the hospital, I have to collect lots of data and store it in my computer.

The word 'data' is treated as a singular mass noun here, so the pronoun referring to it should be singular 'it' instead of plural 'them'.

× The other thing that I like to mention, since I studied English, I had to use it for reading, writing, speak, listening and the like.

✓ The other thing that I like to mention is that since I studied English, I had to use it for reading, writing, speaking, listening and the like.

The verb 'speak' should be in the '-ing' form 'speaking' to match the parallel structure with 'reading', 'writing', and 'listening'. Also, the sentence was missing the verb 'is' after 'mention'.

× If I'm not mistaken, when I got admitted to a university, I use the computers.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, when I got admitted to a university, I used the computers.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'used' instead of present tense 'use'.

× On that time I recall that I hadn't any computers.

✓ At that time I recall that I didn't have any computers.

The phrase 'hadn't any computers' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't have any computers'. Also, 'On that time' should be 'At that time' (preposition correction).

× On that time I recall that I hadn't any computers.

✓ At that time I recall that I didn't have any computers.

The correct preposition to indicate a specific time is 'at' not 'on'.

× We went to a library and we had a tutor and also we had a professor.

✓ We went to a library and we had a tutor and also a professor.

The phrase 'we had a tutor and also we had a professor' is repetitive; combining them improves clarity. No plural issue here but sentence structure can be improved.

× They taught us how we can use the computers. So universities.

✓ They taught us how to use the computers at university.

The phrase 'how we can use the computers' should be 'how to use the computers' for correct sentence structure. 'So universities' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'at university'.

× I believe that it was really terrible.

✓ I believe that it would be really terrible.

The question is about a hypothetical situation in the present or future, so the conditional 'would be' is appropriate rather than past tense 'was'.

× Most people prefer to alter cell phones with computers, but I'm not.

✓ Most people prefer to alter cell phones with computers, but I don't.

The phrase 'alter cell phones with computers' is unclear; likely intended 'use cell phones instead of computers'. Also, 'I'm not' is incomplete; 'I don't' fits better here.

× I cannot focus without computers.

✓ I cannot focus without a computer.

The singular form 'a computer' is more appropriate when referring to the device generally.

× When I want to watch movies, I prefer to download Anush Wrestling and watch with my computer.

✓ When I want to watch movies, I prefer to download Anush Wrestling and watch it on my computer.

The phrase 'watch with my computer' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'watch it' clarifies the object.

× When I go to my workplace, I have to use my computers because I have to collect and store lots of data about.

✓ When I go to my workplace, I have to use my computer because I have to collect and store lots of data.

The plural 'computers' should be singular 'computer'. The phrase 'data about' is incomplete and should be just 'data'.

× I believe that when I go on a vacation, I don't like to connect with my work, so I don't prefer to carry a computer because it distracts me.

✓ I believe that when I go on vacation, I don't like to connect with my work, so I prefer not to carry a computer because it distracts me.

The phrase 'go on a vacation' is better as 'go on vacation'. Also, 'I don't prefer to carry' is awkward; 'I prefer not to carry' is more natural.

× I want to get relaxed and computers, laptops take a lot of space, so it's really difficult to carry them and I I have to dedicate.

✓ I want to relax and computers or laptops take a lot of space, so it's really difficult to carry them and I have to dedicate time.

The phrase 'get relaxed' should be 'relax'. Also, 'computers, laptops' should be 'computers or laptops' for clarity. The sentence ends abruptly; 'I have to dedicate' needs an object, likely 'time'.