Computers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があり、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、「I have to use a computer often because I am a journalist. I do many tasks with it, such as conducting online interviews. However, I am still learning to use it efficiently.」のように表現すると良いでしょう。

Exemplo: I use a computer regularly because I am a journalist. For instance, I conduct many interviews online, so I need to be proficient with computer skills. However, I am still improving my ability to use it effectively.

Sugestão: 回答に多くの文法ミスや不自然な表現があり、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。時制や語彙の使い方を正し、具体的で明確な内容を伝えることが重要です。例えば、「I was 10 years old when my parents bought me a Windows 98 computer. It was a dramatic change for me, and I was amazed at what I could do with it. I especially enjoyed playing games and searching for information online.」のように言い換えると良いでしょう。

Exemplo: I was 10 years old when my parents bought me a Windows 98 computer. It was a dramatic change for me, and I was amazed at what I could do with it. For example, I enjoyed playing games and searching for information on the internet.

Sugestão: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より明確で自然な英語を使い、理由や感情を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。例えば、「It's hard to imagine life without computers. I would probably feel bored, but sometimes it's nice to disconnect from others and have some peace.」のように表現すると効果的です。

Exemplo: It's hard to imagine life without computers. I would probably feel bored, but sometimes it's nice to disconnect from others and have some peace and quiet.

Sugestão: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文の構造が不自然で、語彙の選択も改善の余地があります。より簡潔で明確な表現を使い、理由を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。例えば、「When I am sick, it is hard for me to use a computer because I need to concentrate and use skills like searching and reading English. Therefore, I avoid using it to rest properly.」のように言い換えると良いです。

Exemplo: When I am sick, it is hard for me to use a computer because I need to concentrate and use skills like searching and reading English. Therefore, I avoid using it to rest properly.

× I always have to use a computer because I'm a journalist and there are many things to do by using this tool.

✓ I always have to use a computer because I'm a journalist and there are many things to do using this tool.

The phrase 'by using' is unnecessary here; 'using' alone correctly expresses the means. 'By using' is often redundant and less natural in this context.

× For example, some interviews are done by online right now and so I have to use how to command a computer very well, but I couldn't.

✓ For example, some interviews are done online right now, so I have to know how to operate a computer very well, but I couldn't.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect before 'online'; 'done online' is correct. Also, 'use how to command a computer' is awkward; 'know how to operate a computer' is more natural.

× A winner was 10 years old and my parents bought me a a Windows 98.

✓ I was 10 years old when my parents bought me a Windows 98.

'A winner was 10 years old' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'I was 10 years old'. Also, 'a a' is a typo and should be 'a'.

× This was a very dramatically a change for me.

✓ This was a very dramatic change for me.

'Dramatically' is an adverb but here an adjective 'dramatic' is needed to modify 'change'. Also, 'a' before 'dramatically' is misplaced.

× I was a very astonished about what I can do in the computer.

✓ I was very astonished about what I could do on the computer.

'Astonished' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. Also, 'in the computer' should be 'on the computer'. 'Can' should be past tense 'could' to match past context.

× For example, the plane was very enjoyable and searched a lot of things.

✓ For example, the game was very enjoyable and I searched for a lot of things.

'The plane' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'the game' fits context better. Also, 'searched a lot of things' is incomplete; 'searched for a lot of things' is correct.

× It's a very difficult to imagine without computers I would be very bored, but I think and this life is not so bad, you know, because some connection from others are always bothers me and I can be relieved from such a.

✓ It's very difficult to imagine life without computers. I would be very bored, but I think this life is not so bad, you know, because some connections from others always bother me and I can be relieved from that.

'A very difficult' should be 'very difficult' without 'a'. Sentence structure is fragmented and unclear; it is corrected for clarity and grammar. 'Connection' should be plural 'connections' and 'bothers' should be 'bother' to agree with plural subject.

× And when I get sicker, it's very difficult for me to use a computer because I need a lot of my skills when I use a computer, for example searching something and reading English and others.

✓ When I get sicker, it's very difficult for me to use a computer because I need many skills when I use it, for example, searching for something, reading English, and others.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. 'A lot of my skills' is awkward; 'many skills' is better. 'Searching something' should be 'searching for something'.

× So when I have to sleep well because I get sick, I don't use a computer.

✓ So when I have to sleep well because I am sick, I don't use a computer.

'Get sick' is present tense but here 'am sick' is more appropriate to indicate current condition. The sentence is otherwise correct.