Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ chính xác hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt ý tưởng mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I definitely like drawing because it allows me to express my feelings without words. I find it fascinating, although it is more challenging than many people think.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ lặp lại và tiếng ừ ừ, đồng thời cải thiện cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để kết nối ý tưởng.

Exemplo: Yes, I absolutely enjoy going to galleries because they not only educate people about art and history but also allow artists to express their personality and emotions.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ có liên kết logic, tránh dùng từ không chính xác hoặc lặp lại.

Exemplo: Not really, because I only know a little about art and I am not a professional. Due to my busy schedule, I prefer to focus on other aspects of life, but I hope to have more opportunities to learn about art in the future.

Sugestão: Bạn cần hoàn thiện câu trả lời với cấu trúc rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, tránh nói lắp và kết thúc câu một cách rõ ràng.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid. I dreamed of becoming an artist because I admired how artists express emotions through beautiful pictures, which I found very inspiring.

× I find it's quite fascinating but more channel challenging than people think.

✓ I find it's quite fascinating but more challenging than people think.

The word 'channel' is incorrectly used here; it seems to be a typo or wrong word choice. The correct adjective is 'challenging' to describe the difficulty level. Remove 'channel' to correct the sentence.

× I can convey what I want to say without talking saying with a word.

✓ I can convey what I want to say without talking or saying a word.

The phrase 'talking saying with a word' is incorrect and confusing. The correct expression is 'without talking or saying a word' to indicate nonverbal communication.

× Umm, because gallery not not only uh, education way to educate people throughout the art, uh, about the history or any aspect of life, and but also a good way to express their personality and their emotion.

✓ Umm, because galleries are not only an educational way to teach people about art, history, or any aspect of life, but also a good way to express their personality and emotions.

The original sentence has multiple issues: repetition ('not not'), missing verb ('galleries are'), incorrect noun form ('education way' should be 'educational way'), and awkward conjunctions. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× I think I just know a little bit about they are not professionally because I have a busy schedule, so I want to spend more time to another aspect of life.

✓ I think I just know a little bit about art, not professionally, because I have a busy schedule, so I want to spend more time on other aspects of life.

The phrase 'about they are' is incorrect; it should be 'about art'. Also, 'to another aspect' should be 'on other aspects' to correctly express spending time on different things.

× And uh, I wished in the near future I can more opportunity, opportunities to learn about it.

✓ And uh, I wish in the near future I can have more opportunities to learn about it.

The verb 'wished' is past tense but the context is about the future, so it should be 'wish'. Also, 'can more opportunity' is incorrect; it should be 'can have more opportunities'.

× You know, it's a funny story because when I was a kid, I have a dream to become a artist because I always appreciate the artist, how they can express the emotion throughout the beautiful picture and you know they have so cool because they have.

✓ You know, it's a funny story because when I was a kid, I had a dream to become an artist because I always appreciated artists and how they can express emotion through beautiful pictures. You know, they are so cool because they have talent.

The sentence has multiple tense errors: 'I have a dream' should be past tense 'I had a dream'; 'I always appreciate' should be 'I always appreciated'. Also, article usage: 'a artist' should be 'an artist'. The sentence is also incomplete and awkward, so it is rephrased for clarity.