Teacher— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 直接的な主張はあるが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長さ、不自然な表現が目立つ。話の流れを整理し、トピック文→理由→具体例の順で簡潔にまとめる練習をすること。接続語（for example, therefore, because, so）を正しく使い、時制と単複に注意すること。具体的には「My favorite teacher was my junior high history teacher because he gave me extra lessons after school, which helped me get into high school.」のように一文目で要点を述べ、二文目で詳細を補足する形を意識する。

Exemplo: My favorite teacher was my junior high history teacher because he gave me extra lessons after school that helped me get into high school. For example, I struggled with history at that time, so he noticed my difficulties and stayed after class to explain important topics until I understood them.

Sugestão: 主旨は伝わるが、時制や表現の一貫性が欠け、文が切れていたり冗長になっている。否定で始める代わりに短く明確に答え、その後簡潔に理由と感情を述べる練習をすること。接続詞とカンマで文をつなぎ、不要な語を省く。例えば「I kept in touch until I graduated from junior high, but I lost contact after moving to university, and I regret that now.」のようにまとめる。

Exemplo: No, I am not. I kept in touch with my primary school teachers until I finished junior high, but after I went to university far from my hometown I gradually lost contact, and I regret that now.

Sugestão: 回答は具体例を含んでいるが、文法間違いや断片的な文、語彙の選択ミスがある（"more higher"など）。一つの主張を明確に述べ、続けて具体的な結果を示す練習をすること。接続語（therefore, as a result, so）や比較表現を正しく使う。例えば「He gave me extra lessons and tips, so my grades improved and I grew to love history.」のように簡潔に表現する。

Exemplo: He helped me by giving extra one-on-one lessons and useful tips after school, so my grades improved and I eventually developed a real interest in history.

Sugestão: 答えは明確だが理由の伝え方に問題がある（語彙や文法の誤り、冗長な説明、因果関係の表現が不明瞭）。負の経験を述べる際は時制と語彙を正しく使い、短く論理的にまとめる練習をすること。また"crown school"など不明確な語は避けるか説明を加える。例えば「I don't want to be a teacher because I lost confidence after working part-time and not achieving expected results.」のように言う。

Exemplo: I don't want to be a teacher. When I worked part-time tutoring junior high students at university, my lessons didn't help them improve as much as I hoped, and that experience made me lose confidence in my teaching abilities.

× My favorite teacher is junior high school history teacher because he gave me some extra lessons after school and helped me get high school.

✓ My favorite teacher is my junior high school history teacher because he gave me some extra lessons after school and helped me get into high school.

The sentence needs the definite article 'my' before 'junior high school history teacher' to specify which teacher. Also the verb phrase should be 'get into high school' to indicate admission. Improve by adding appropriate articles and using correct collocations: 'my junior high school history teacher' and 'get into high school'.

× For example, when I was a junior high school students, I was not good at history subjects and the teacher noticed that.

✓ For example, when I was a junior high school student, I was not good at history and the teacher noticed that.

'Students' is plural but the subject refers to 'I', so use singular 'student'. Also 'history subjects' is unnatural; use 'history' or 'history subjects' only if plural context. Improve by matching singular/plural and simplifying noun phrase.

× I could not free understand the lessons.

✓ I could not fully understand the lessons.

'Free' is incorrect adverb here; the intended meaning is 'fully' or 'completely'. Place the adverb before the verb 'understand'. Use 'fully understand' for clarity.

× Therefore he said that after school lessons for me and I could get high school after that.

✓ Therefore he said that he would give after-school lessons to me, and I was able to get into high school afterwards.

Original lacks necessary verbs and clear structure. Add 'he would give' to indicate the teacher's action, use 'after-school lessons', 'to me' for the object, and 'was able to get into high school afterwards' to show result. Maintain past tense consistency.

× No actually I kept in touch with my primary school teachers by graduating junior high school.

✓ No, actually I kept in touch with my primary school teachers after graduating from junior high school.

'By graduating junior high school' is incorrect preposition and missing 'from'. Use 'after graduating from junior high school' to indicate time. Add comma after 'No' for natural speech pacing.

× However, since then I've lost connections with them because I went to university and it was far from my hometown I now I'm regretting.

✓ However, since then I've lost contact with them because I went to university, which was far from my hometown, and now I regret it.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. Use 'lost contact' (singular) not 'lost connections', separate clauses with commas, use 'which was' to refer to the university, and 'I regret it' for present feeling. Keep tense consistent.

× Losing the opportunities to communicate with primary school teachers.

✓ I regret losing the opportunity to communicate with my primary school teachers.

Fragment lacks a main verb; turn it into a full sentence by adding subject 'I' and verb 'regret'. Use singular 'opportunity' or 'opportunities' consistently and add 'my' for clarity.

× My favorite teacher had lessons only for me because I could not fully understand the lessons.

✓ My favorite teacher held lessons just for me because I could not fully understand the material.

'Had lessons' is less natural; use 'held lessons' or 'gave lessons'. Also avoid repeating 'lessons' twice; replace the second with 'material' or 'the lessons'. Maintain singular/plural consistency.

× For example, when I was a junior high school students, my teacher had extra lessons after school and gave me some tips for the subjects therefore I could get.

✓ For example, when I was a junior high school student, my teacher held extra lessons after school and gave me some tips for the subjects, so I could improve my grades.

'Students' should be singular 'student'. Add a clear result clause: 'so I could improve my grades' instead of incomplete 'I could get.' Use commas to link clauses.

× More higher results and now I love history subjects.

✓ I achieved higher results, and now I love history.

'More higher' is ungrammatical (double comparative). Use 'higher results' or 'better results'. 'History subjects' is better as 'history'. Make it a complete sentence with a subject and verb.

× In the future, I would not like to be a teacher because I'm not confident or being a teacher.

✓ In the future, I would not like to be a teacher because I'm not confident about being a teacher.

Original mixes forms. Use 'confident about being a teacher' to express lack of confidence. Keep conditional 'would not like' consistent.

× For example, when I was a university student, I worked at a crown school for junior high school students in that school.

✓ For example, when I was a university student, I worked at a cram school for junior high students.

'Crown school' is likely a miswording; 'cram school' fits context. Remove redundant 'in that school' and simplify 'junior high students'.

× The the students could not get high scores due to my lessons.

✓ The students could not get high scores despite my lessons.

Typo 'The the'. Use 'despite' to show contrast between the effort and outcome, or 'from my lessons' if cause. Clarify intended meaning; 'despite my lessons' fits if results were poor.

× Therefore I lost my confidence of teaching skills, so I will not be.

✓ Therefore I lost confidence in my teaching skills, so I do not want to be a teacher.

Use 'confidence in' not 'confidence of'. 'Teaching skills' is fine. 'So I will not be' is incomplete; specify 'I do not want to be a teacher' to complete the thought.