Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but to improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more coherent. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors like 'at the night' which should be 'at night'. For example, you can say 'After returning from the temple, I visit my grandparents to seek their blessings. Later in the evening, my family organizes a big party where all relatives and friends gather to celebrate.'

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually wake up early to attend prayers at the temple. After that, I visit my grandparents to seek their blessings. In the evening, my family arranges a big party, and all our relatives and friends come together to celebrate the occasion.

Sugestão: Your answer covers the main points but has some repetition and grammatical errors. To improve, try to structure your answer with clear linking words and avoid repeating words like 'I'. Also, use past tense consistently and add more specific details. For example, 'When I was young, I used to wake up early, wear colourful new clothes, and go to school where I distributed chocolates to my classmates. In the evening, I celebrated with a family party.'

Exemplo: When I was young, I used to wake up early on my birthday, wear colourful new clothes, and go to school. I would distribute chocolates to my classmates as a treat. Later in the evening, my family and I would have a small party to celebrate.

Sugestão: Your answer expresses your feelings well but can be improved by using more precise grammar and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use 'have been living' instead of 'am living' for ongoing past action, and 'has come' instead of 'come'. Also, avoid repeating 'but' consecutively. You can say, 'I believe celebrating my birthday is very important, especially with my family. However, since I have been living far from them for two years, I haven't been able to celebrate together. Fortunately, my cousin has come over from Scarborough to make my day special.'

Exemplo: I believe it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday, particularly with my family members. However, since I have been living far away from them for the past two years, I haven't been able to celebrate with them. Fortunately, my cousin has come over from Scarborough to make my day special.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing because you mention India instead of China, and the name 'Gevallen Arrow' is unclear. To improve, make sure to answer the question directly and clearly. Also, use linking words to explain your points logically. For example, 'In China, I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of a national figure or a traditional festival. However, in India, Children's Day is celebrated on the birthday of Jawaharlal Nehru to honour children's efforts and future development.'

Exemplo: In China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are usually those of family elders or national leaders. For example, the birthday of Confucius is celebrated to honour his contributions to Chinese culture. Similarly, in India, Children's Day is celebrated on the birthday of Jawaharlal Nehru to recognise the importance of children in society.

× Well, I usually get up early in the morning to go for prayer in temple.

✓ Well, I usually get up early in the morning to go for prayer at the temple.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate location for 'temple' is 'at'. So, 'at the temple' is the proper phrase.

× On my way back I visit my grandparents house to seek their blessings.

✓ On my way back I visit my grandparents' house to seek their blessings.

The phrase 'grandparents house' lacks the possessive apostrophe. It should be 'grandparents' house' to show possession by grandparents.

× At the night my family organizes a big party and all my family and friends come together and celebrate my birthday.

✓ At night my family organizes a big party and all my family and friends come together and celebrate my birthday.

The phrase 'At the night' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'At night' without the definite article 'the'.

× Well, when I was young I I had school at that point.

✓ Well, when I was young I had school at that time.

The phrase 'at that point' is less appropriate for referring to past habitual events; 'at that time' is more suitable in this context.

× So I get up early, get ready, wear new clothes on my birthday, colorful clothes and go school, distribute chocolates to my class.

✓ So I got up early, got ready, wore new clothes on my birthday, colorful clothes, and went to school, distributed chocolates to my class.

Since the question is about past events, the verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency.

× And at night I in the evening I do party with my family.

✓ And in the evening I have a party with my family.

The phrase 'do party' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a party'. Also, 'at night I in the evening' is redundant; 'in the evening' suffices.

× Well I do believe that it's very significant for me to celebrate my birthday but I would love to do it with my family members.

✓ Well, I do believe that it's very significant for me to celebrate my birthday, and I would love to do it with my family members.

The sentence needs a conjunction 'and' to connect the two independent clauses properly.

× But since I am living far from them since 2 years I haven't been able to celebrate with them.

✓ But since I have been living far from them for 2 years, I haven't been able to celebrate with them.

The present perfect continuous tense 'have been living' is appropriate for an action continuing from the past to present. Also, 'for 2 years' is the correct prepositional phrase for duration.

× But my cousin come over from Scarborough to make my day special.

✓ But my cousin comes over from Scarborough to make my day special.

The subject 'my cousin' is singular, so the verb should be 'comes' to agree in number.

× Well, in India, I think. Uhm, Gevallen Arrow's birthday is most significant to celebrate because on that day, Children's Day is celebrated all over India which marks to celebrate each child's effort so that.

✓ Well, in India, I think, Uhm, Gopal Rao's birthday is the most significant to celebrate because on that day, Children's Day is celebrated all over India which marks the celebration of each child's effort so that.

The name 'Gevallen Arrow' seems incorrect; assuming it is 'Gopal Rao'. Also, 'marks to celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'marks the celebration'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Society in future becomes more productive.

✓ So that society in the future becomes more productive.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a conjunction. Adding 'So that' connects it properly to the previous clause and clarifies the purpose.