Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why. Avoid repetition (e.g. "time" twice) and use past tense consistently. Add a linking phrase for clarity.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was in Primary 5. At that time, COVID-19 caused schools to close, so we had online classes using apps like Zoom and Google Meet.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence about frequency, then give a specific routine and reason. Use natural phrases ("to relax" instead of "gives me some recharge") and avoid vague words.

Exemplo: I go online every day, usually after school and during breaks. I mainly use the internet to relax and watch short videos or chat with friends.

Sugestão: Keep the answer direct and tidy: state when, why, and result. Use correct time expressions ("last year during exams") and avoid unnecessary words like "at the time" twice. Add a linking word to connect cause and effect.

Exemplo: Yes. Last year during my exam period, my dad took away my phone because I was spending too much time on social media, so I couldn't go online for a week.

Sugestão: Be precise and correct vocabulary: "scrolling feeds" not "scrolling meals". Use present simple for habits and give a specific example and consequence. Avoid mixing tenses unnecessarily.

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I usually spend about three hours a day scrolling social media feeds on Instagram and Facebook, which affects my study time.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give brief reasons or examples. Use parallel structure and natural phrases like "relax and recharge". Keep it within a few sentences.

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would draw or sing because those hobbies relax me and help me recharge. For example, I might practice guitar and sketch for an hour each evening.

× I started using the Internet when I was in Primary 5 because at that time since the time when COVID-19 started and we have online classes through some apps like Zoom and Google Meet.

✓ I started using the Internet in Primary 5 because when COVID-19 began we had online classes through apps like Zoom and Google Meet.

The original sentence is wordy and contains redundant phrases ('at that time since the time when'). Also tense consistency and verb choice needed correction: 'when COVID-19 began' is simpler and 'we had online classes' uses past tense to match 'started'. Simplify to avoid repetition and ensure past-tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I go online every day, usually after school or at break time at home because Internet gives me some recharge and some enjoyable time.

✓ I go online every day, usually after school or during break time at home because the Internet gives me a chance to relax and enjoy myself.

Missing article 'the' before 'Internet' and awkward noun usage 'gives me some recharge' is incorrect; 'a chance to relax and enjoy myself' is natural. Also 'at break time at home' is better as 'during break time at home'. This fixes article use and improves word choice and adverb placement. Grammar problem type ID:17

× At the time it was my exam period in last year.

✓ At that time it was my exam period last year.

Redundant temporal markers 'at the time' and 'in last year' create awkward phrasing. Use 'At that time' or 'last year'; combine as 'At that time it was my exam period last year' or better 'Last year it was my exam period.' Also remove unnecessary preposition 'in'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× My dad took away my phone because I was too addicted to the social media online.

✓ My dad took away my phone because I was too addicted to social media online.

Do not use 'the' before uncountable noun 'social media' in this context. 'The social media' is incorrect unless referring to specific platforms previously mentioned. Keep phrase 'addicted to social media' and 'online' is acceptable but could be omitted. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yes, I definitely think I've spent too much time online because I usually spend around 3 hours a day on scrolling meals like on Instagram and Facebook.

✓ Yes, I definitely think I spend too much time online because I usually spend around three hours a day scrolling through feeds on Instagram and Facebook.

Mixed tenses: 'I've spent' with 'I usually spend' is inconsistent; use present simple 'I spend' to match habitual action. '3' should be written as 'three' in formal writing; 'scrolling meals' is wrong—likely 'scrolling feeds'. Use 'scrolling through feeds' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Draw or sing without the Internet because these are my hobbies and I enjoy them very much.

✓ I would draw or sing without the Internet because these are my hobbies and I enjoy them very much.

The sentence lacks a subject and modal needed to answer the hypothetical question 'What would you do without the internet?'. Add 'I would' to indicate the conditional. This fixes sentence structure and aligns tense with a hypothetical scenario. Grammar problem type ID:26