Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve tense accuracy and reduce redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two concise supporting details (reason and first activity). Use linking words like “so” or “then” appropriately and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was in twelfth grade. I had just bought my first smartphone, so I bought a data plan and began exploring online; the first thing I did was create an email account.

Sugestão: Make the answer more fluent and grammatical. Start with a clear frequency statement, then list main purposes using linking words like “mainly” or “mainly for” and avoid fragmented sentences. Be specific about proportions or typical times of day if possible.

Exemplo: I usually spend about four to five hours online each day. I mainly use the internet for studying, streaming videos, playing games, and chatting with friends.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (past tense, subject–verb agreement) and clarify the reason. Use one or two concise supporting sentences and link ideas with words like “because” or “so.” Replace awkward phrasing with natural expressions like “disconnect from the internet.”

Exemplo: Yes. I couldn’t use the internet during my brother’s wedding because my parents asked us to disconnect so we could fully enjoy the ceremony.

Sugestão: Use consistent tense and smoother phrasing. Give a direct opinion, then explain briefly why and suggest a specific plan to change, using linking words such as “because” and “so.”

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I spend around four to five hours online daily, which I think is too much because it affects my productivity, so I plan to limit myself to two hours a day.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve clarity. Start with a clear conditional statement, then give specific activities you would do instead of being online. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “loved ones”) and keep to two supporting details max.

Exemplo: If there were no internet, I would spend more time with my loved ones and dedicate more hours to my hobbies, such as reading and painting.

× I start using the Internet when I was in 12th standard.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in 12th standard.

The sentence describes a past event; the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the time reference 'when I was'. Use past simple for completed past actions.

× At that time I got my first smartphone and so I bought a net pack and start using the Internet and the first thing I did was to make an e-mail account.

✓ At that time I got my first smartphone, so I bought a data pack and started using the Internet, and the first thing I did was create an email account.

Multiple verbs refer to past events and must be in past tense: 'start' -> 'started'. 'Net pack' is unnatural in this context; 'data pack' or 'data plan' is more natural. 'Make an e-mail account' is better as 'create an email account.' Also use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× I usually spend at least four to five hours on the Internet.

✓ I usually spend at least four to five hours on the Internet.

Sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present habitual meaning; no correction needed.

× I use for. I use it for studies, for watching, playing games and checking chatting with friends.

✓ I use it for studying, watching videos, playing games, and chatting with friends.

Remove the fragment 'I use for.' and use gerunds to list activities consistently: 'studying' not 'studies', 'watching videos' clearer than 'watching', and 'chatting with friends' instead of 'checking chatting'. Maintain parallel structure in the list.

× Yes, I remember a time when I couldn't use the Internet during my brother wedding.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I couldn't use the Internet during my brother's wedding.

Use past tense 'couldn't' is correct, but 'brother wedding' needs possessive apostrophe 'brother's' to show the wedding belongs to the brother.

× My parents wants to do us to disconnect or Internet and enjoy marriage function.

✓ My parents wanted us to disconnect from the Internet and enjoy the wedding.

'Parents' is plural so use 'wanted' (past) not 'wants'. The correct construction is 'wanted us to disconnect from the Internet'. 'Marriage function' is unnatural; use 'wedding' or 'wedding ceremony'. Also 'or' is incorrect here.

× Yes, I think so. I'm spending about four to five hours on Internet every day and I think I should not spending more than two hours on Internet.

✓ Yes, I think so. I spend about four to five hours on the Internet every day, and I think I should not spend more than two hours online.

Use simple present 'I spend' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm spending' (although continuous could work, simple present is natural here). 'Should not spending' is incorrect; use modal 'should' + base verb 'spend'. Add 'the' before Internet and 'online' is more natural than repeating 'on Internet'.

× I can't imagine a life without the Internet but it is happen.

✓ I can't imagine a life without the Internet, but it could happen.

'It is happen' is ungrammatical. Use modal 'could' + base verb 'happen' to express possibility: 'it could happen.' Keep the contrast with a comma.

× I think I would spend more more time with my loved 1 and I would I would give more time to my hobby and Internet.

✓ I think I would spend more time with my loved ones, and I would give more time to my hobbies and less to the Internet.

Fix repetition 'more more' to 'more', 'loved 1' is incorrect; use 'loved ones'. Remove duplicate 'I would'. Use plural 'hobbies' if referring to multiple, and clarify intention by saying 'less to the Internet.' Maintain parallel structure.