Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to give a direct and clear response with a proper timeline and avoid redundancy. For example, specify the age clearly and mention what you did online in a concise way.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was about five years old. At that time, I mainly watched movies and read stories online.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat confusing and repetitive. Try to give a clear estimate of your daily internet usage and explain why, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I usually spend about 12 hours online every day because I work as a programmer, so I need to use the internet for my job.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a direct response and explain the reason clearly with specific details, avoiding hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually don't use the internet when I travel because I prefer to enjoy the experience without distractions.

Sugestão: Your answer is vague and lacks explanation. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons or examples, using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, about six hours a day, mainly because I work and socialize on the internet.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear and logical response about activities you would do without the internet, with specific examples.

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would spend more time playing games and reading books to gain new experiences.

× I started, uh, working work with, uh, Internet, uh, I watched movies and some stories.

✓ I started working with the Internet, watching movies and some stories.

The phrase 'working work' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'started working' using the verb + -ing form after 'started'. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a specific noun.

× I started, uh, working work with, uh, Internet, uh, I watched movies and some stories.

✓ I started working with the Internet, watching movies and some stories.

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'.

× Usually I mean 24 hours. I I online about 12 hours because I'm a programmer and every every day I work with Internet.

✓ Usually, I mean 24 hours. I am online about 12 hours because I'm a programmer and every day I work with the Internet.

The phrase 'I I online' is missing a verb; it should be 'I am online'. Also, 'work with Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'. The repeated word 'every every' is a redundancy and should be corrected to 'every'.

× Usually I mean 24 hours. I I online about 12 hours because I'm a programmer and every every day I work with Internet.

✓ Usually, I mean 24 hours. I am online about 12 hours because I'm a programmer and every day I work with the Internet.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' because it is a specific noun.

× Yeah uh, usually, uh, when I, uh, when I want to travel, traveling, I don't use the Internet because in my opinion, uh, I don't like that because uh, it can, uh.

✓ Yeah, usually, when I want to travel, I don't use the Internet because, in my opinion, I don't like that.

The word 'traveling' is incorrectly placed after 'when I want to'. The correct form is to use either 'when I want to travel' or 'when I am traveling'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should be ended properly.

× Yeah uh, usually, uh, when I, uh, when I want to travel, traveling, I don't use the Internet because in my opinion, uh, I don't like that because uh, it can, uh.

✓ Yeah, usually, when I want to travel, I don't use the Internet because, in my opinion, I don't like that.

The phrase 'in my opinion' is correctly used, but the sentence is incomplete and contains unnecessary filler words. Removing filler words improves clarity.

× I think I spend 2, about 6 hours online.

✓ I think I spend about 6 hours online.

The number '2' is unnecessary and confusing in this context. The correct expression is 'about 6 hours' to indicate approximate time.

× Uh, at the first, uh, I can play game, uh, maybe you save itself.

✓ At first, I can play games, maybe save myself.

The phrase 'at the first' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'at first'. 'Play game' should be pluralized to 'play games' to indicate general activity. 'You save itself' is incorrect pronoun usage and reflexive pronoun use; it should be 'save myself'.

× Uh, at the first, uh, I can play game, uh, maybe you save itself.

✓ At first, I can play games, maybe save myself.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used when referring to oneself; it should be 'I'. Also, 'itself' is a reflexive pronoun used for objects or animals, but for people, 'myself' is correct.

× Uh, at the first, uh, I can play game, uh, maybe you save itself. Why? Because, uh, I can get, uh, very, very, uh, big, uh, experiences with this, with that.

✓ At first, I can play games, maybe save myself. Why? Because I can gain a lot of experience from this and that.

The phrase 'big experiences' is unnatural; 'a lot of experience' is more appropriate. Also, 'get' is better replaced with 'gain' when referring to experience. The phrase 'with this, with that' is vague; 'from this and that' is clearer.