Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to make your sentences grammatically correct and complete. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I started using the Internet in 2009 when I had to register for my school examination. I went to a cafe to access the Internet for the first time. It was a new experience for me, and I found it very useful for completing my form online.

Sugestão: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add a bit more specific detail.

Exemplo: I usually go online every day for about half an hour. Due to my busy schedule, I don't spend much time on social media. However, whenever I have some free time or an idea comes to my mind, I use social media to connect with friends or find information.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but a bit confusing due to double negatives and unclear phrasing. Try to use clear and simple sentences, and avoid negative constructions like 'not strictly not allowed'.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember during my college exams, we were not allowed to use the Internet on our mobile phones. We could only use phones for calculations, but accessing the Internet or downloading anything was prohibited to prevent cheating.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but the word 'refrigerate' is incorrectly used here. Use appropriate vocabulary to express relaxation. Also, try to add linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Certainly not. I usually spend less than half an hour online due to my busy schedule. I rarely get leisure time, but whenever I do, I go online to relax and unwind myself.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and by making sentences more concise and natural. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: If there were no Internet, I would spend more time reading books. I am a bookworm, but the Internet often distracts me from this hobby. So, without it, I would definitely explore the books in my collection more deeply.

× I vividly remember the first time when I used the Internet was in the year 2009 when I have to appear in my mood examination and I have to register the examination form.

✓ I vividly remember the first time I used the Internet was in the year 2009 when I had to appear in my mood examination and I had to register the examination form.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the event happened in the past, 'have to' should be changed to 'had to' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I went to the cafe and I used the Internet for the first time to fulfill my examination form and it was a.

✓ I went to the cafe and used the Internet for the first time to fill out my examination form.

The sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. 'Fulfill my examination form' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'fill out my examination form'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and it was a.' which is incomplete and should be removed.

× Because of my busy schedule, I don't go uh to social media very often, but whenever I have leisure time or something pop ups in my mind, I start using social media and go online for this.

✓ Because of my busy schedule, I don't go on social media very often, but whenever I have leisure time or something pops up in my mind, I start using social media and go online for this.

The correct preposition with 'go' in this context is 'on' social media, not 'to'. Also, 'pop ups' should be 'pops up' to agree with singular subject 'something'.

× However, for calculation purpose we can use our mobile phones but we were not strictly not allowed to use the Internet for downloading.

✓ However, for calculation purposes we could use our mobile phones but we were strictly not allowed to use the Internet for downloading.

'Can' should be changed to 'could' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'not strictly not allowed' is a double negative and should be corrected to 'strictly not allowed'. 'Calculation purpose' should be pluralized to 'calculation purposes'.

× I don't get leisure time to spend on online tasks.

✓ I don't get leisure time to spend on online tasks.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× However, whenever I get extra time to refrigerate myself, I go online and unwind myself.

✓ However, whenever I get extra time to refresh myself, I go online and unwind.

The word 'refrigerate' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'refresh' to mean rejuvenate. Also, 'unwind myself' is redundant; 'unwind' alone suffices.

× I think without the Internet I would love to read books.

✓ I think without the Internet I would love to read books.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× But in case the Internet stops one day, I would definitely delve deeper into the reading section of my house.

✓ But in case the Internet stops one day, I would definitely delve deeper into the reading section of my house.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.