Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'addicted in Internet' 대신 'addicted to the Internet'를 사용해야 하며, 표현이 반복적이고 명확하지 않습니다. 더 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 답변을 구성하세요.

Exemplo: I started using the Internet when I was in elementary school. I quickly became very interested in it and spent a lot of time online.

Sugestão: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고 반복적입니다. 'I got online' 대신 'I go online'을 사용하고, 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 더 자연스럽고 논리적인 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

Exemplo: I go online every day. For example, I usually check my social media accounts first thing in the morning and again before I go to bed.

Sugestão: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'I was junior in high school' 대신 'I was a junior in high school'를 사용하고, 시제 일치에 주의하세요. 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a junior in high school, my parents restricted my smartphone use while I was preparing for university entrance exams.

Sugestão: 시제 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'I spent' 대신 'I spend'를 사용하고, 'social comment'는 부적절한 표현입니다. 더 자연스럽고 정확한 단어를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I spend too much time online. Even during short breaks, I always check my social media and browse the Internet.

Sugestão: 전반적으로 이해는 되지만, 문법과 표현이 다소 어색합니다. 'in near my home' 대신 'near my home'을 사용하고, 'Pets'는 소문자로 쓰세요. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요.

Exemplo: Well, it depends on the situation. Usually, I would take a walk in the park near my home or play with my pets at home.

× So I got addicted in Internet.

✓ So I got addicted to the Internet.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to use with 'addicted' is 'to'. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a unique entity.

× I couldn't get off my hands with Internet.

✓ I couldn't get my hands off the Internet.

The phrase 'get my hands off' is an idiomatic expression meaning to stop holding or using something. The original sentence misplaces 'off' and 'with'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Internet'.

× Well, actually I got online every single day.

✓ Well, actually I get online every single day.

The question asks about a habitual action, so the present simple tense 'get' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'got'.

× when I wake up I firstly check my social media accounts and Internet

✓ when I wake up I first check my social media accounts and the Internet

The adverb 'firstly' is less common and awkward here; 'first' is more natural. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Internet'.

× and when I go to bed I'm doing same ways.

✓ and when I go to bed I do the same things.

The phrase 'doing same ways' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'do the same things' or 'do the same'.

× Yes, it was when I I was junior in high school so I prepared for my entry university exams.

✓ Yes, it was when I was a junior in high school and I was preparing for my university entrance exams.

The phrase 'I I was junior' has a repeated word and missing article 'a'. Also, 'entry university exams' is incorrect; the correct term is 'university entrance exams'. The conjunction 'and' is better than 'so' here to connect the clauses.

× So my parents restrict me to use smartphone.

✓ So my parents restricted me from using my smartphone.

The verb 'restrict' should be in past tense 'restricted' to match the past context. Also, the correct structure is 'restrict someone from doing something'. 'Smartphone' should be preceded by 'my'.

× Yes, I spent too much time online so whenever I have a break time, even though it is too short, I always check my social comment and the Internet.

✓ Yes, I spend too much time online, so whenever I have a break, even though it is very short, I always check my social comments and the Internet.

The first verb should be present tense 'spend' to match the habitual action. 'Break time' is better as 'break'. 'Social comment' should be plural 'social comments'. 'Very' is more natural than 'too' in this context.

× Well it depends on the situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

A comma is needed after 'Well' to separate the introductory word from the main clause.

× I usually take a walk around the park in near my home and also I usually play with my Pets at Home.

✓ I usually take a walk around the park near my home, and I also usually play with my pets at home.

The phrase 'in near my home' is incorrect; it should be 'near my home'. 'Pets' should not be capitalized. A comma is needed before 'and' to separate the clauses.