Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中时态使用不准确，应将“I started using the Internet when I'm 10 years old”改为过去时态，且句子结构可以更自然流畅。

Exemplo: I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old. At that time, I created my first social media account to chat with my friends.

Sugestão: 回答中表达不够自然，‘two times a week’应改为‘twice a week’，‘everyday’应为副词‘every day’，且最后一句表达不清晰，应更具体。

Exemplo: When I was a child, I went online about twice a week. But now, I go online every day to check the latest news and find answers to my questions.

Sugestão: 时态错误较多，‘I want’应为过去时‘I wanted’，句子结构略显冗长，建议简化并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

Exemplo: Yes, when I was 10 years old, I created my first social media profile and wanted to go online every day, but my parents only allowed me to use the internet on weekends.

Sugestão: 表达不够地道，‘deal up with’应为‘deal with’，句子较长且缺少连接词，建议分句并使用连接词使表达更自然。

Exemplo: Yes, I spend too much time online because I need to deal with work-related conversations. Besides, I also chat with my friends online during my spare time.

Sugestão: 词汇使用错误，‘depose’用错，应为‘complete’或‘do’，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰，建议重组句子并使用更准确的词汇。

Exemplo: Without the internet, I wouldn't be able to complete my work tasks. In daily life, I also rely on the internet to watch my favorite movies and listen to music.

× I started using the Internet when I'm 10 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

这里描述的是过去发生的事情，应该使用过去时态。'I'm'是现在时，应该改为过去时的'was'。

× I went online for about two times a week.

✓ I went online about two times a week.

'for'在这里多余，表达频率时直接用'about two times a week'即可。

× I need to go online everyday.

✓ I need to go online every day.

'everyday'是形容词，表示“日常的”，这里应使用副词短语'every day'表示“每天”。

× I want to go online every day, but my parents just let me go online on the weekends.

✓ I wanted to go online every day, but my parents just let me go online on the weekends.

描述过去的愿望，动词应使用过去时'wanted'，而不是现在时'want'。

× I need to deal up with my work conversation on the Internet and in my spare time I also chat with my friends online.

✓ I need to deal with my work conversation on the Internet and in my spare time I also chat with my friends online.

'deal with'是固定搭配，不能加'up'，'deal up with'是不正确的用法。

× I can't depose my work tasks without the Internet and for life I need to use the Internet, display my favorite film and favorite music.

✓ I can't do my work tasks without the Internet and in life I need to use the Internet to watch my favorite films and listen to my favorite music.

'depose'用错了，正确动词是'do'，表示“做工作任务”。'display'用法不当，应该用'watch'和'listen to'来表达看电影和听音乐。