Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，注意时态和主谓一致。

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. At that time, my mother had an old mobile phone that she didn't use, so she gave it to me. I used it mainly to listen to music and watch cartoons.

Sugestão: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并且注意词汇的准确使用。

Exemplo: I go online every day because I have my own mobile phone. I use it to search for information and communicate with my friends and teachers.

Sugestão: 回答表达了主要意思，但语法和用词错误较多。建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

Exemplo: Yes, when I was in secondary school, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet because I needed to focus on studying for my high school exams. They thought using phones would distract me.

Sugestão: 回答不够清晰，语法混乱，表达重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免口语化的犹豫和重复。

Exemplo: To be honest, I do spend a lot of time online because I use my computer and phone to study and read materials.

Sugestão: 回答内容不够具体，表达不流畅，有语法错误。建议明确表达假设情况，使用连贯句子描述活动。

Exemplo: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time outdoors. For example, I might play basketball or football with my friends, or take walks around the university and by the river, which would be enjoyable.

× That's all you see the Internet when I was in primary school, because in that time I was very lucky to listen to music and watch some cartoons.

✓ That's all you saw the Internet when I was in primary school, because at that time I was very lucky to listen to music and watch some cartoons.

这里描述的是过去的情况，动词时态应使用过去式。原句中'see'应改为'saw'，'in that time'应改为'at that time'。

× And in that time my mom have a mobile phone so which is free.

✓ And at that time my mom had a mobile phone which was free.

主语是单数'mom'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数过去式'had'。'so which is free'结构不正确，应改为'which was free'。

× She don't want to share the new 1, so she gave it to me and I used it to watch cattle and listen music.

✓ She doesn't want to share the new one, so she gave it to me and I used it to watch cartoons and listen to music.

第三人称单数时，助动词应为'doesn't'而非'don't'。'new 1'应改为'new one'。'watch cattle'应为'watch cartoons'，'listen music'应为'listen to music'。

× Everyday I go home everyday because I have my own mobile phone, so I use it every day and I need to search some information and I need to communicate with my friends, with my teachers, so I go nice very often.

✓ Every day I go home because I have my own mobile phone, so I use it every day and I need to search for some information and communicate with my friends and my teachers, so I go online very often.

'Everyday'是形容词，表示日常的，应改为副词短语'every day'。'search some information'应为'search for some information'。'go nice'应为'go online'。

× So I don't be allowed to use the mobile phones because it's distract my distract me from my studies.

✓ So I wasn't allowed to use mobile phones because they distracted me from my studies.

'don't be allowed'用法错误，应该用过去时态'wasn't allowed'。'it's distract my distract me'结构错误，应为'they distracted me'。

× So my parents don't allow me to use the phones in the time so.

✓ So my parents didn't allow me to use the phones at that time.

描述过去情况，助动词应为'didn't'。'in the time'应为'at that time'。

× Yeah, I spent a long time online, so, and because I need you, sorry, I bet.

✓ Yeah, I spent a long time online, and because I needed to, sorry, I bet.

前半句是过去时，后半句应保持时态一致，'need'应改为'needed'。

× And I need to study in the computer or in the mobile phones, I need to read some materials, reading some text in the mobile phones or computers, so I will use.

✓ And I need to study on the computer or on the mobile phone. I need to read some materials and texts on the mobile phone or computer, so I will use them.

'study in the computer'应为'study on the computer'。'mobile phones'单数形式更合适。句子末尾缺少宾语，应补充'them'。

× If I can use the Internet, I might to transport, maybe play some basketball and play some football with my friends and I might, I might help with my friends.

✓ If I couldn't use the Internet, I might go out, maybe play some basketball and football with my friends, and I might help my friends.

条件句中表达假设，应该用过去时态'couldn't use'。'might to transport'结构错误，应为'might go out'。'help with my friends'应为'help my friends'。

× Like we just walk around in the university, walk around by the river. It is very funny.

✓ For example, we just walk around the university, walk by the river. It is very fun.

'Like'用作举例不合适，改为'For example'。'walk around in the university'应为'walk around the university'。'very funny'描述活动应为'very fun'。