Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构较为混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意冠词和数词的使用。

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because my dad bought a computer for me. It was quite popular at that time.

Sugestão: 回答内容较丰富，但句子较长且有语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更连贯，同时注意动词形式和词汇搭配。

Exemplo: I go online almost every day. It helps me keep up with current events around the world. Also, as a finance student, I use the internet to learn more about finance, which is very helpful.

Sugestão: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子，明确时间和事件，注意主谓一致和时态的正确使用。

Exemplo: Yes, I remember when I was in senior high school during my internship. We were not allowed to use the internet for too long, and our phone usage was strictly limited.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子不完整且不连贯。建议简化表达，明确观点，使用正确的词汇和句型。

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. It can harm my eyes, and sometimes I waste time unless I am doing something meaningful.

Sugestão: 回答表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，部分词汇使用不当。建议使用更自然的表达，注意句子完整性和词汇准确性。

Exemplo: I can't imagine life without the internet, but I think I would spend more time talking with my friends, playing puzzles, or traveling. There are many ways to enjoy my time without using phones or the internet.

× At that time the computer was quite popular and my dad bought 1 for me.

✓ At that time, computers were quite popular and my dad bought one for me.

此处“computer”应使用复数形式“computers”，因为指的是电脑作为一种普及的设备，而非单一一台电脑；数字“1”应写为单词“one”。

× Frankly speaking, almost every day because go online can let me know about current events happening around the world and also as I'm a student majoring in finance, I can surf on the Internet to know some finance knowledge which was quite helpful.

✓ Frankly speaking, almost every day because going online can let me know about current events happening around the world and also, as I'm a student majoring in finance, I can surf the Internet to learn some finance knowledge which is quite helpful.

动词“go”后应使用动名词形式“going”表示习惯性动作；“surf on the Internet”中“on”多余，应直接用“surf the Internet”；“to know”应改为“to learn”更符合表达习惯；“which was”应改为“which is”保持时态一致。

× The most impressive experience during that period is when I interning 2 years three studying in my Senior High School.

✓ The most impressive experience during that period was when I was interning for 2 years while studying in my Senior High School.

句中“interning”应使用过去时态“was interning”以符合时间背景；“2 years three”表达不清，应改为“for 2 years”；“studying”前应加连词“while”表示同时发生。

× Everyone here are not allowed to use Internet for too much time and our phones using time are strictly restricted.

✓ Everyone here is not allowed to use the Internet for too much time and our phone usage time is strictly restricted.

主语“Everyone”是单数，谓语动词应为“is”；“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”；“phones using time”表达不当，应改为“phone usage time”；谓语动词“are”应改为“is”与单数主语一致。

× On the one hand, spending too much time focusing on the OR computer is bad for my eyes and also it with too much time unless I was some meaningful things online.

✓ On the one hand, spending too much time focusing on the computer is bad for my eyes and also it wastes too much time unless I am doing some meaningful things online.

“OR”应删除；“it with too much time”表达错误，应改为“it wastes too much time”；“unless I was”时态错误，应改为“unless I am”；整体句子结构需调整使表达清晰。

× I can't imagine, but I guess maybe I'll talk with my friends and play some interesting things such as puzzles or just traveling around. So there are many ways that I can consume my time freely when I do not have phones and do not access to.

✓ I can't imagine, but I guess maybe I'll talk with my friends and play some interesting games such as puzzles or just travel around. So there are many ways that I can spend my time freely when I do not have phones and do not have access to the internet.

“play some interesting things”表达不当，应改为“play some interesting games”；“traveling around”应改为动词原形“travel around”与前文动词形式一致；“do not access to”缺少动词，应改为“do not have access to the internet”。