Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'oh'. Also, use correct grammar such as 'I started using the internet when I was very young because my parents introduced it to me, and it has been very helpful for my studies and work.'

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was very young because my parents introduced it to me. It has been very helpful for my educational studies and work.

Sugestão: Your answer covers many points but lacks coherence and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. For example, say 'I go online multiple times a day. Mostly, I use it to connect with my family and friends to maintain communication. Besides that, I enjoy online shopping, social news, entertainment, and I also use it for study purposes.'

Exemplo: I go online multiple times a day. Mostly, I use it to connect with my family and friends to maintain communication. Besides that, I enjoy online shopping, social news, entertainment, and I also use it for study purposes.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and repetitive. Try to give a clear and concise response. For example, 'I cannot remember a specific time when I was not allowed to use the internet. However, my parents are strict about phone usage during study time and exams. Also, mobile phones are not allowed during flights.'

Exemplo: I cannot remember a specific time when I was not allowed to use the internet. However, my parents are strict about phone usage during study time and exams. Also, mobile phones are not allowed during flights.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words. Try to express your opinion clearly and explain with reasons. For example, 'Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I watch videos and use social media for entertainment. I am trying to reduce my screen time to balance my daily activities.'

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I watch videos and use social media for entertainment. I am trying to reduce my screen time to balance my daily activities.

Sugestão: Your answer has good ideas but is not well structured and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, 'Without the internet, I would spend more time reading, which helps me concentrate better. I would also spend more time with my family and enjoy hobbies like playing with children.'

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading, which helps me concentrate better. I would also spend more time with my family and enjoy hobbies like playing with children.

× I started my, I started using Internet since when I was very young, my parents introduced the network, uh, which is very helpful for educational study and work. Oh.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was very young; my parents introduced the network, which was very helpful for educational study and work.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'since when' with past tense 'started' which is not appropriate. 'Since' is used with present perfect tense, but here simple past is suitable. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'which is very helpful' should be in past tense 'was' to match the past context. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I started my, I started using Internet since when I was very young, my parents introduced the network, uh, which is very helpful for educational study and work. Oh.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was very young; my parents introduced the network, which was very helpful for educational study and work.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. Omitting 'the' is a common error but incorrect in standard English.

× I often go multiple times a day, Mostly I use it to connect with my family members and friends to stay up the communication better or better.

✓ I often go online multiple times a day. Mostly, I use it to connect with my family members and friends to maintain better communication.

The phrase 'go multiple times a day' is incomplete; it should specify 'go online'. Also, 'stay up the communication better or better' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'maintain better communication'. The definite article is not needed before 'communication' here.

× I often go multiple times a day, Mostly I use it to connect with my family members and friends to stay up the communication better or better.

✓ I often go online multiple times a day. Mostly, I use it to connect with my family members and friends to maintain better communication.

The phrase 'stay up the communication' is incorrect; the correct preposition and verb combination is 'maintain communication'. Prepositions must be used correctly to convey the intended meaning.

× And I really enjoyed the online shopping with the communication, social news, entertainment and use it for uh study purpose.

✓ And I really enjoy online shopping, social news, entertainment, and use it for study purposes.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'online shopping' and 'communication'. Also, 'study purpose' should be plural 'study purposes' to be idiomatic. The verb tense is corrected to present tense 'enjoy' to match the habitual action.

× I think no exactly. I can't even tell the time, but my parents are strictly, but my parents are strict, uh, restricted with the rules and regulations of uses of phone while studying, even my exams during during my exams.

✓ I don't think exactly. I can't even tell the time, but my parents are strict and restrict phone use while studying, even during my exams.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'I think no exactly' is incorrect; 'I don't think exactly' or better 'I can't remember exactly' is appropriate. 'Are strictly' is incorrect; 'are strict' is correct adjective usage. 'Restricted with the rules' should be 'restrict phone use'. Repetition 'during during' is an error.

× So even in flight there is no uses of mobile.

✓ So even in flight, there is no use of mobile phones.

The phrase 'no uses of mobile' is incorrect; 'no use of mobile phones' is correct. Also, 'in flight' should be followed by a comma for clarity. The plural 'phones' is more natural here.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time on online uh, because there are some social activities like uh, videos and entertainment purpose, and I used it to reduce the time by using screen time.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online because there are social activities like videos and entertainment, and I try to reduce my screen time.

The preposition 'on' before 'online' is incorrect; 'spend time online' is correct. 'Entertainment purpose' is incorrect; 'entertainment' alone suffices. The phrase 'used it to reduce the time by using screen time' is unclear; corrected to 'try to reduce my screen time' for clarity.

× Without Internet I could do many things even though uh I go for reading and it helps me more concentration and I used to spend my family members and even though I can go for hobbies that is very interested in playing with the children.

✓ Without the Internet, I could do many things. For example, I could read more, which helps me concentrate better. I also spend time with my family members and enjoy hobbies, such as playing with children, which I find very interesting.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; it is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'Go for reading' is incorrect; 'read more' is appropriate. 'Helps me more concentration' should be 'helps me concentrate better'. 'Used to spend my family members' is incorrect; corrected to 'spend time with my family members'. The phrase 'hobbies that is very interested' is incorrect; corrected to 'hobbies which I find very interesting'.