Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Améliorez la grammaire en utilisant le temps passé correctement et évitez les erreurs comme "begin" au lieu de "began". Utilisez des phrases plus naturelles et complètes, par exemple en expliquant pourquoi vous avez commencé à utiliser Internet à cet âge.

Exemplo: I started using the Internet when I was 15 years old. At that time, I used an old and large computer mainly to write documents for school.

Sugestão: Faites attention à l'ordre des mots et à la fluidité, par exemple "I often use social media such as YouTube and Instagram". Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus cohérente.

Exemplo: I often go online because I use social media platforms like YouTube and Instagram regularly. Besides that, I also do a lot of research for my studies.

Sugestão: Votre réponse est claire et bien structurée. Pour l'améliorer, vous pouvez ajouter un mot de liaison pour mieux connecter les idées et enrichir la réponse avec un détail supplémentaire.

Exemplo: When I was 15 years old, my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet at night because they wanted me to sleep early and avoid being late for school the next day.

Sugestão: Faites attention à la grammaire, par exemple "I really spend" au lieu de "I'm really spend". Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide et évitez la répétition de "a lot of time".

Exemplo: I believe I spend too much time online because I do a lot of research for my studies. Moreover, I enjoy watching series and movies, so I often find myself in front of the screen for several hours.

Sugestão: Évitez les expressions confuses comme "Reboot the Internet" qui ne sont pas naturelles. Commencez par une phrase claire répondant directement à la question, puis développez avec des détails spécifiques.

Exemplo: If I didn't have the Internet, I would spend more time doing outdoor activities like rowing and indoor hobbies such as reading and drawing. I especially enjoy reading fantasy books because they help me escape reality in a positive way.

× I begin using the Internet when I was 15 years old.

✓ I began using the Internet when I was 15 years old.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense 'began' instead of the present tense 'begin'.

× I used an old and big computer only for write documents.

✓ I used an old and big computer only to write documents.

After 'for', the verb should be in the '-ing' form or use 'to' + base verb. Here, 'to write' is correct instead of 'write'.

× I frequently go online because I use really often social media such as YouTube, Instagram.

✓ I frequently go online because I really often use social media such as YouTube, Instagram.

The adverb 'really often' should be placed before the verb 'use' to maintain correct word order.

× so I'm really spend a lot of time in front of the screen.

✓ so I really spend a lot of time in front of the screen.

After the subject 'I', the verb should be in base form 'spend' without 'am' when expressing habitual actions.

× Reboot the Internet.

✓ I would reboot the Internet.

The sentence lacks a subject and auxiliary verb to form a complete sentence. Adding 'I would' completes the sentence structure.