Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，避免重复和冗余。可以简洁明了地描述开始使用互联网的时间和当时的活动。

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was about 7 or 8 years old. At that time, I mainly used it to play games with my classmates and watch cartoons online.

Sugestão: 回答较为自然，但存在重复和语法错误。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复词汇，并且丰富细节。

Exemplo: I go online almost every day because smartphones and computers are essential in modern life. I usually check messages from my friends and tutors, and search for information when needed.

Sugestão: 回答不连贯且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议先明确回答问题，然后用连贯的句子描述具体情况。

Exemplo: Yes, I remember after finishing high school, my father bought me a new computer as a gift. However, he soon realized I was spending too much time playing games on Steam, so he limited my internet use.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法和用词错误，表达不够自然。建议用更准确的词汇和句式表达时间和活动内容。

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Every day, I spend about 9 to 10 hours looking at screens, watching memes, and chatting with people online.

Sugestão: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议简洁明了地表达如果没有互联网会做什么，并用具体细节支持。

Exemplo: If I didn't have the internet, I would read the books I bought a long time ago but never had time to read because I am addicted to my phone.

× I remember the first time I using the Internet.

✓ I remember the first time I used the Internet.

这里应该使用过去式，因为描述的是过去发生的动作。动词"use"的过去式是"used"，而不是现在分词"using"。

× Internet around my was around my 708 years old and at the time I just use computers for fun like playing games with my classmates or just watching watch some cartoons.

✓ The internet around me was when I was about 7 or 8 years old, and at the time I just used computers for fun like playing games with my classmates or just watching some cartoons.

句子中"Internet around my was around my 708 years old"结构混乱，且数字表达错误，应为"7 or 8 years old"。另外，"use"应为过去式"used"，"watching watch"重复，应去掉一个。

× Or almost every day you know our modern life couldn't live without smartphones or computer.

✓ Almost every day, you know, our modern life couldn't live without smartphones or computers.

句子缺少主语，且"computer"应为复数"computers"，因为指代一般的电脑。

× I usually go online to reply some messages from my friends or tutor or just search search for some informations.

✓ I usually go online to reply to some messages from my friends or tutor or just search for some information.

"reply"后应加介词"to"，"informations"是不可数名词，正确形式是"information"。

× Oh well, I remember when I just finished my high school time and celebrate and I bought my father bought me a new computer.

✓ Oh well, I remember when I just finished my high school and celebrated, and my father bought me a new computer.

"celebrate"应为过去式"celebrated"，且句子结构混乱，"I bought my father bought me"错误，应为"my father bought me"。

× Computer as gift.

✓ The computer was a gift.

缺少冠词"The"，且句子不完整，应补充谓语动词。

× But soon he find is maybe a good thing, a good sign because I play Steam games all the days so he won't.

✓ But soon he found it was maybe a good thing, a good sign because I played Steam games all day, so he wouldn't mind.

"find"应为过去式"found"，"is"应为"it was"，"play"应为过去式"played"，"all the days"应为"all day"，句尾"so he won't"不完整，应补充完整。

× Yes of course I think like before I everyday I just screw my screens and watch some memes, have a conversation with others from online.

✓ Yes, of course I think before I used to spend every day staring at my screen and watching some memes, having conversations with others online.

"screw my screens"应为"stare at my screen"，"everyday"用作副词应为"every day"，时态应为过去式描述习惯动作。

× It takes me about 9 or 10 hours online.

✓ I spend about 9 or 10 hours online.

"It takes me"表达不自然，描述花费时间应使用"I spend"。

× Without Internet and be I'm going to raise some books I bought a long time ago but I don't have much time to read in another world I had.

✓ Without the Internet, I am going to read some books I bought a long time ago, but I don't have much time to read. In another world, I am addicted to my phone, so the books gather dust.

缺少冠词"the"，"and be"无意义，应改为"I am going to read"，"raise some books"错误，应为"read some books"，句子结构混乱，需拆分。

× I'm addicted to my phone so the book has dust over.

✓ I'm addicted to my phone, so the books have gathered dust.

"book"应为复数"books"，"has dust over"表达错误，应为"have gathered dust"。