Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence gulo onekta incomplete mone hocche. Apni direct question er uttor din, tarpor kichu supporting details add korun, jemon kon boyoshe internet use kora shuru korlen, keno Facebook use korten, etc. Linking words use korun jate answer ta natural lage.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was about 10 years old. At the age of 13, I bought a phone from my friend mainly to use Facebook. It helped me connect with friends and learn new things online.

Sugestão: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar sentence structure improve kora dorkar. Apni direct question er uttor din, tarpor linking words diye supporting details add korun. For example, 'Recently, I don't go online much because of work, but before I used to spend 2-3 hours daily.'

Exemplo: Recently, I don't go online very often because I am busy with important tasks at work. However, before that, I used to spend about two to three hours online every day.

Sugestão: Apnar uttor incomplete mone hocche, ar kichu sentence structure o grammar error ache. Apni proshner uttor direct din, tarpor kichu specific details add korun. Linking words use korun jate answer ta logical lage.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember when I was preparing for my university admission. My family did not allow me to use mobile phones or laptops so that I could focus on my studies without distraction.

Sugestão: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence gulo onekta incomplete. Apni direct uttor din, tarpor supporting details add korun linking words diye. For example, 'Yes, I spend 3 to 4 hours online daily, which affects my work and study because notifications distract me.'

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend about three to four hours online every day. This is negative for me because I have many tasks and studies to focus on, but notifications often distract me.

Sugestão: Apnar uttor bhalo, kintu aro natural korte paren. Apni direct uttor din, tarpor kichu supporting details add korun linking words diye. For example, 'Without the internet, I would spend more time playing outdoor games like cricket or indoor games like carrom with my friends.'

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would spend more time playing games such as cricket in front of my house or carrom with my roommates.

× Actually, I'm using the Internet from my childhood.

✓ Actually, I have been using the Internet since my childhood.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the present continuous tense 'I'm using' to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. The correct tense is present perfect continuous 'have been using' to express this ongoing action. Also, 'from my childhood' should be 'since my childhood' to indicate the starting point of the action.

× When I was at 13, I bought a phone from my friends and to use Facebook and it was really helpful for me to connect with the social world through Facebook at a young age, so.

✓ When I was 13, I bought a phone from my friend to use Facebook, and it was really helpful for me to connect with the social world through Facebook at a young age.

The phrase 'at 13' should be 'when I was 13' for correct expression of age. 'Friends' should be singular 'friend' if referring to one person. The phrase 'and to use Facebook' is incorrect; it should be 'to use Facebook' as an infinitive phrase explaining purpose. The sentence was also fragmented; combining the parts improves clarity.

× Usually in recent times I don't have much time to use mobile phones or laptops because I am working on a important task in my office.

✓ Usually, recently, I don't have much time to use mobile phones or laptops because I am working on an important task in my office.

The phrase 'Usually in recent times' is awkward; 'Usually, recently' or 'Recently' is better. Also, 'a important' is incorrect; it should be 'an important' because 'important' starts with a vowel sound.

× But previously in previous days I used to spend two or three hours in online.

✓ But previously, I used to spend two or three hours online.

The phrase 'in previous days' is redundant and awkward; 'previously' alone suffices. Also, 'in online' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted, so 'spend time online' is correct.

× Yes I think I spend a lot of time like 3 to 4 hours in online and it's really negative for me because I have a lot of work to do and focus my study.

✓ Yes, I think I spend a lot of time, like 3 to 4 hours, online, and it's really negative for me because I have a lot of work to do and need to focus on my studies.

The phrase 'in online' is incorrect; it should be 'online' without a preposition. Also, 'focus my study' is incorrect; it should be 'focus on my studies' to use the correct verb-preposition combination and plural form for 'studies'.

× Because of online they sent me notification and I keep distracted.

✓ Because of being online, they send me notifications, and I get distracted.

The phrase 'Because of online' is incorrect; it should be 'Because of being online' or 'Because I am online'. 'They sent me notification' should be 'they send me notifications' to match present tense and plural form. 'I keep distracted' is incorrect; it should be 'I get distracted' to express the effect properly.

× Without the Internet, I used to play games like playing cricket in front of my house or playing carroms with my roommates.

✓ Without the Internet, I used to play games like cricket in front of my house or carroms with my roommates.

The phrase 'used to play games like playing cricket' is redundant; 'used to play games like cricket' is sufficient. The verb 'playing' is unnecessary here and disrupts sentence flow.