Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 시제 일치와 명확한 이유 제시가 필요합니다.

Exemplo: I started using the Internet when I was 8 years old because I often watched videos online. Since then, I have been familiar with using the Internet from a young age.

Sugestão: 답변이 비교적 자연스럽지만 문장이 완성되지 않은 부분이 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

Exemplo: I go online every day because I like to keep in touch with my friends through social media platforms like Instagram. Moreover, I enjoy sharing photos and updates about my life, which helps me feel connected even when we are far apart. Additionally, going online allows me to stay informed about current events.

Sugestão: 문법과 문장 구조가 매우 불완전합니다. 명확한 문장 구성과 시제 일치를 통해 의미를 분명히 전달해야 합니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought I was spending too much time online. Therefore, I had to stop using it for a while.

Sugestão: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 시제와 동사 형태를 올바르게 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online sometimes. My parents even limited my Internet use so that I could concentrate more on my homework and studies.

Sugestão: 문장이 다소 어색하고 연결이 부족합니다. 자연스러운 표현과 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Exemplo: If I didn't have the Internet, I would hang out outside with my friends. When I was young, there was no Internet, so we usually played games like tag and hide and seek outdoors.

× I start using the Internet when I was 8 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 8 years old.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense 'started' instead of the present tense 'start'.

× Becauses I usually have to watch something video when I it.

✓ Because I usually have to watch some videos when I use it.

The word 'Becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'Because'. Also, 'something video' is incorrect; 'some videos' is appropriate. The phrase 'when I it' is incomplete and should be 'when I use it'.

× I usually have to watch something video when I it.

✓ I usually have to watch some videos when I use it.

The verb phrase 'have to watch' is acceptable, but 'something video' is incorrect; it should be 'some videos'. Also, 'when I it' is incomplete and should be 'when I use it'.

× I started using the Internet when I was young.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was young.

This sentence is correct as it uses past tense appropriately to describe a past event.

× Fine, I go online every day because I like to keep in touch with my friends through social media platforms like Instagram.

✓ I go online every day because I like to keep in touch with my friends through social media platforms like Instagram.

The word 'Fine' at the beginning is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow; it should be removed.

× I also enjoy sharing photos and updates about my life, which helped me feel connected even when we're far apart.

✓ I also enjoy sharing photos and updates about my life, which helps me feel connected even when we're far apart.

The verb 'helped' is past tense, but the sentence context is present; it should be 'helps' to agree with present tense.

× Additionally, going online allows me to stay informed about the.

✓ Additionally, going online allows me to stay informed about current events.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly; it needs a complete object after 'about the'.

× Yes, I remember a time that I was isn't allowed to use the Internet when I was young because my parents.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was young because of my parents.

The phrase 'I was isn't allowed' is incorrect; it should be 'I wasn't allowed'. Also, 'because my parents' is incomplete; it should be 'because of my parents'. 'That' should be 'when' to refer to time.

× Don't like to use all my much so I.

✓ They didn't like me to use it too much, so I

The phrase 'Don't like to use all my much' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'They didn't like me to use it too much' to express the intended meaning.

× Don't use the Internet. When I.

✓ didn't use the Internet when I was young.

The sentence fragments 'Don't use the Internet. When I.' are incomplete and need to be combined and completed for clarity.

× Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought I was spending too much time online so they want to did to me.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought I was spending too much time online, so they wanted me to.

The phrase 'they want to did to me' is incorrect. It should be 'they wanted me to' to correctly express past intention.

× To concentrate more on my homework and studies.

✓ They wanted me to concentrate more on my homework and studies.

The phrase is a sentence fragment and needs a subject and verb to be complete.

× I would go to hanging out side.

✓ I would go hanging outside.

The phrase 'go to hanging out side' is incorrect. The correct form is 'go hanging outside' or 'go out hanging'. 'Outside' is one word here.

× With my friends, without the Internet.

✓ with my friends without the Internet.

The comma is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow; it should be removed.

× When I was young there was no Internet so I usually go outside and play like tag, hide and seek activities.

✓ When I was young, there was no Internet, so I usually went outside and played games like tag and hide and seek.

The verbs 'go' and 'play' should be in past tense 'went' and 'played' to match the past time frame. Also, 'play like tag, hide and seek activities' is awkward; 'played games like tag and hide and seek' is clearer.