Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答时语言不够自然，有重复和语法错误，且内容不够连贯。建议简洁明了地表达起始时间，并补充具体活动，避免重复。

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was about three years old. At that time, I mainly used it to play simple computer games and explore interesting websites.

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，内容杂乱无章。建议用简洁句子表达频率，并具体说明上网的主要活动。

Exemplo: I go online almost every hour. I usually check my messages and watch interesting videos on my phone.

Sugestão: 回答有语法错误且表达不够流畅。建议直接说明原因和情境，使用连贯的句子表达。

Exemplo: Yes, I remember when I was preparing for an important exam as a child. My parents took away my phone and computer to help me focus and avoid distractions.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法和表达混乱，内容不连贯。建议明确表达观点，说明原因并举例。

Exemplo: Yes, sometimes I spend too much time online, especially when I play games or browse unrelated information without purpose.

Sugestão: 回答表达不清且有语法错误。建议用简洁句子列举具体活动，表达清楚自己的喜好。

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would spend time with my friends, like singing at KTV, watching movies in the cinema, or traveling together. I find these activities more enjoyable than being online.

× I started using the Internet when I was very young, at about 3:00, at about the age of three.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was very young, at about the age of three.

句中“at about 3:00”与“at about the age of three”重复且不合适，去掉“at about 3:00”使句子更通顺。

× That's that's when I started to use the computer to search for some interesting things or play some little computer games.

✓ That's when I started using the computer to search for some interesting things or play some little computer games.

动词“start”后接动名词形式更自然，改为“started using”。

× I currently I go online every every moment.

✓ I currently go online almost every moment.

“every every moment”重复且不合适，改为“almost every moment”更符合表达习惯。

× To look some car do some messages that I received all.

✓ To look at some chats and check some messages that I received.

“look”后应加介词“at”，且“car”应为“chat”，“do some messages”表达不当，改为“check some messages”。

× Search some interesting videos to see in some.

✓ Search for some interesting videos to watch.

“search”后应加介词“for”，且“to see in some”表达不完整，改为“to watch”。

× Yes, I could remember a time that I I was facing a important exam while I was at a young age, so my parents just took over to my phones and computers away and don't and didn't allow me to use them causes it's a way to disturb my.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I was facing an important exam at a young age, so my parents took my phones and computers away and didn't allow me to use them because it would disturb me.

“could remember”应为一般过去时“remember”，“a important”应为“an important”，“took over to my phones and computers away”表达错误，改为“took my phones and computers away”，“don't and didn't”重复且错误，改为“didn't”，“causes it's a way to disturb my”表达不完整，改为“because it would disturb me”。

× Yeah, sometimes I think I spend too much time online becaused I'm sometimes I just using the Internet doing some.

✓ Yeah, sometimes I think I spend too much time online because sometimes I just use the Internet doing some.

“becaused”拼写错误，应为“because”，“I'm sometimes I just using”语法错误，改为“sometimes I just use”。

× On meaningful things like playing some games or search for some.

✓ On meaningless things like playing some games or searching for some.

“On meaningful things”与后文语境不符，应为“On meaningless things”，“search”应改为动名词“searching”。

× In unrelated, unrelated questions, answers on the Internet, or just.

✓ Unrelated questions and answers on the Internet, or just.

“In unrelated”用法错误，改为“Unrelated questions and answers”更符合表达。

× I could do a lot of things without Internet, for instance I could go out with my friends to seem to seem some songs in KTV or Watcher.

✓ I could do a lot of things without the Internet, for instance I could go out with my friends to sing some songs in KTV or watch.

“without Internet”缺少冠词“the”，“seem to seem some songs”应为“sing some songs”，“Watcher”应为“watch”。

× Moving is the cinema, what else it could be go to travelled with someone else.

✓ Watching movies in the cinema, or I could go travelling with someone else.

“Moving is the cinema”表达错误，改为“Watching movies in the cinema”，“go to travelled”语法错误，改为“go travelling”。

× Is more appealing to me than using the Internet.

✓ It is more appealing to me than using the Internet.

句子缺少主语，应加“It is”。