Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words. Also, avoid grammatical errors and redundancy to make your answer more natural and effective.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was in 5th standard. At that time, my family got a smartphone with internet connection. The first thing I did was watch a song on YouTube, which was a great experience for me because I really enjoyed listening to music online.

Sugestão: Focus on making your sentences grammatically correct and coherent by using appropriate linking words. Also, try to be concise and avoid repetition while providing specific reasons for your online activities.

Exemplo: I go online every day using my smartphone. Mainly, I use social media platforms to stay socially active and keep in touch with my friends. Additionally, I upload photos and videos to share my happiness and stay updated about current events in my country.

Sugestão: Try to answer directly and clearly, using correct grammar and linking words to explain the situation. Avoid incomplete sentences and provide specific details about your feelings and the impact of not using the internet.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember when I was in 10th standard, the government banned internet access for a few days. During those three days, I couldn't use the internet, which made me feel sad because I couldn't upload my daily activities on social media.

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural by using simpler and clearer sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, explain your opinion with specific reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I admit that I spend a lot of time online. I usually use social media platforms like Instagram and Facebook to watch videos about food and people's daily lives. This not only entertains me but also helps me learn new things.

Sugestão: Try to organise your answer with clear sentences and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of activities you would do without the internet.

Exemplo: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time with my friends by going for walks or playing sports like volleyball. Also, since I come from a farming family, I would help in the fields, especially when the weather is good.

× I corrected remember when I was in my 5th standard my family members about the smart phone with the connection of Internet.

✓ I clearly remember when I was in my 5th standard my family members got a smartphone with an Internet connection.

The phrase 'corrected remember' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'clearly remember'. Also, 'my family members about the smart phone' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'my family members got a smartphone'. The verb tense should be past tense to match the time frame 'when I was in my 5th standard'.

× I first time use it for watching a song on a YouTube.

✓ I used it for the first time to watch a song on YouTube.

The phrase 'I first time use it' is incorrect; it should be 'I used it for the first time'. Also, 'for watching a song' should be 'to watch a song'. 'A YouTube' is incorrect; 'YouTube' does not need an article.

× I knew too that experience and after enjoying and listening music sometime I feel very good and I think it was my great experience to listen music on.

✓ I also knew that experience, and after enjoying and listening to music sometimes I felt very good. I think it was a great experience to listen to music online.

The verb tenses need to be consistent in past tense: 'knew', 'felt'. 'Listening music' should be 'listening to music'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Listen music on' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to music online'.

× I go to online.

✓ I go online.

The phrase 'go to online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go online' without the preposition 'to'.

× Everyday using my smartphone, I mainly use social media platform to stay socially active and keep in touch with my friends and always get a information about what are happening in my country and additionally I also upload my photos and videos on Internet to describe my current happiness.

✓ Every day, I use my smartphone mainly to access social media platforms to stay socially active, keep in touch with my friends, and always get information about what is happening in my country. Additionally, I also upload my photos and videos on the Internet to share my current happiness.

'Everyday' should be 'Every day' as two words. 'Using my smartphone' is incomplete; it should be 'I use my smartphone'. 'Social media platform' should be plural 'platforms'. 'Get a information' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'What are happening' should be 'what is happening'. 'On Internet' should be 'on the Internet'.

× Yes, I corrected. Remember when I was in my 10 standard, due to some government issue they are a ban on Internet connection and we have to face difficulty by using Internet.

✓ Yes, I remember. When I was in my 10th standard, due to some government issues, there was a ban on Internet connection and we had to face difficulties using the Internet.

'I corrected. Remember' is incorrect; it should be 'I remember'. '10 standard' should be '10th standard'. 'They are a ban' is incorrect; it should be 'there was a ban'. 'Have to face difficulty' should be 'had to face difficulties'. 'By using Internet' should be 'using the Internet'.

× So that was a time when I used to stay away from Internet for three days and I feel very sad and unhappy becaused I did not upload on social media my daily task and did not.

✓ So that was a time when I stayed away from the Internet for three days and I felt very sad and unhappy because I did not upload my daily tasks on social media.

'Used to stay away' is acceptable but 'stayed away' is clearer here. 'Feel' should be past tense 'felt'. 'Becaused' is a typo; correct is 'because'. 'Did not upload on social media my daily task and did not' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'did not upload my daily tasks on social media'.

× Yes no doubt I'm a socially addictive person and I'm usually like to spend most of my time using social media platform like Instagram and Facebook and see the videos of food and people logs all the day as it provide me amusement and it gained my knowledge also.

✓ Yes, no doubt I'm socially addicted and I usually like to spend most of my time using social media platforms like Instagram and Facebook, watching videos of food and people's vlogs all day as it provides me amusement and also increases my knowledge.

'Socially addictive person' is incorrect; it should be 'socially addicted'. 'Social media platform' should be plural 'platforms'. 'See the videos of food and people logs' should be 'watching videos of food and people's vlogs'. 'All the day' should be 'all day'. 'It provide' should be 'it provides'. 'It gained my knowledge' should be 'it increases my knowledge'.

× Depart from using Internet, I usually spend my times with my friends are go for a walk or running out to play some specific activity like volleyball and additionally if there us good season are with very good climate.

✓ Apart from using the Internet, I usually spend my time with my friends, go for a walk, or go out running to play some specific activities like volleyball. Additionally, if there is a good season with very good climate,

'Depart from using Internet' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'Apart from using the Internet'. 'Spend my times' should be 'spend my time'. 'Are go for a walk or running out' is incorrect; it should be 'go for a walk or go out running'. 'Some specific activity' should be 'some specific activities'. 'If there us good season are with very good climate' is incorrect; it should be 'if there is a good season with very good climate'.

× I usually go in my field because I belongs to a farmer family and we usually do a farming in our field.

✓ I usually go to my field because I belong to a farmer family and we usually do farming in our field.

'Go in my field' should be 'go to my field'. 'I belongs' should be 'I belong'. 'A farmer family' is acceptable but 'a farming family' is more natural. 'Do a farming' should be 'do farming'.