Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and ends abruptly. Try to give a clear topic sentence and complete your thoughts. Also, avoid grammatical errors like 'didn't even knew' (should be 'didn't even know'). Keep your answer concise and relevant.

Exemplo: I started using the internet in the early 2000s when I was a child. At first, I used Google to search for simple things like fruits and educational topics, and I was amazed by how much information was available.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical mistakes like 'there are so much information' (should be 'so much information'). Also, the phrase 'bread and butter today' is used incorrectly. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

Exemplo: I go online almost all the time nowadays because there is so much information available. Moreover, I need to be online to communicate with my loved ones and to work efficiently. Therefore, staying connected has become an essential part of daily life.

Sugestão: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'one GP was costing me'. Also, avoid using numbers like '2' instead of 'too'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember a time when I was not allowed to use the internet because data charges were very expensive in India. For example, one gigabyte of data cost around ₹250, which is about $4. Due to this, my father restricted my internet use at home to save money.

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy like 'making a Google search to search'. Also, be careful with article usage, e.g., 'learning about few things' should be 'learning about a few things'.

Exemplo: Yes, I spend more time online than average, usually around four to five hours a day. This includes work, social media, and learning new things by searching different topics on Google.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and has grammatical errors like 'An operates over the Internet'. Try to give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid ending abruptly with 'I don't know'.

Exemplo: It is difficult to imagine life without the internet because almost everything depends on it. For instance, we use it to communicate with loved ones, send emails for work, and gain knowledge. Without the internet, many daily activities would become challenging.

× I think the first encounter of me using the Internet was at the early 2000s when I didn't even knew what Internet was.

✓ I think the first encounter of me using the Internet was in the early 2000s when I didn't even know what the Internet was.

The verb 'knew' is incorrect here because after 'didn't' we use the base form of the verb, which is 'know'. Also, 'at the early 2000s' should be 'in the early 2000s' as we use 'in' for years and decades. Additionally, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× I think the first encounter of me using the Internet was at the early 2000s when I didn't even knew what Internet was.

✓ I think the first encounter of me using the Internet was in the early 2000s when I didn't even know what the Internet was.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to years or decades; the correct preposition is 'in'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Internet' as it is a specific noun.

× Currently, it's been a habit that you can't stay offline any moment because there are so much information online.

✓ Currently, it's become a habit that you can't stay offline at any moment because there is so much information online.

The phrase 'any moment' requires the preposition 'at' to be correct. Also, 'there are so much information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and should be used with 'is' instead of 'are'.

× Currently, it's been a habit that you can't stay offline any moment because there are so much information online.

✓ Currently, it's become a habit that you can't stay offline at any moment because there is so much information online.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be used with singular verb 'is' instead of plural 'are'. Also, 'so much' is correct with uncountable nouns.

× You need to be present online to talk to your loved ones or work at office.

✓ You need to be present online to talk to your loved ones or work at the office.

The phrase 'work at office' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'office'. In English, we say 'work at the office'.

× So it is bread and butter today. To be online and stay up to date it.

✓ So it is bread and butter today to be online and stay up to date.

The sentence is fragmented and the pronoun 'it' at the end is unnecessary and causes confusion. The sentence should be combined properly without the extra 'it'.

× Oh yes this is a funny 1.

✓ Oh yes, this is a funny one.

The numeral '1' should be written as the word 'one' in this context. Also, a comma after 'Oh yes' improves clarity.

× So there was a time when the Internet costs or data charges where 2 high, especially in India.

✓ So there was a time when the Internet costs or data charges were too high, especially in India.

The word 'where' is incorrect here; it should be 'were' as the past tense of 'be'. Also, '2' should be 'too' to indicate excessiveness.

× I remember one GP was costing me around ₹250 which is like $4.00 currently.

✓ I remember one GB was costing me around ₹250 which is like $4.00 currently.

Assuming 'GP' is a typo for 'GB' (gigabyte), which is the correct term for data measurement. The sentence is otherwise correct in past tense.

× And my father who used to have a broadband at our home was restricted for me to use the Internet because there was 2 consuming too much.

✓ And my father, who used to have broadband at our home, restricted me from using the Internet because it was consuming too much.

The phrase 'was restricted for me to use' is incorrect; the correct form is 'restricted me from using'. Also, 'there was 2 consuming too much' is incorrect; it should be 'it was consuming too much'. Commas are added for clarity.

× Yeah, I think I usually spend more than average as a person who uses Internet about more than a four to five hours a day, which includes my work and a little bit of free time on social media, learning about few things or making a Google search to search about different topics.

✓ Yeah, I think I usually spend more than average as a person who uses the Internet about four to five hours a day, which includes my work and a little bit of free time on social media, learning about a few things or making Google searches to learn about different topics.

'Uses Internet' should be 'uses the Internet'. 'More than a four to five hours' is incorrect; 'about four to five hours' is correct. 'Few things' should be 'a few things' to indicate some. 'Making a Google search to search about' is awkward; better to say 'making Google searches to learn about'.

× learning about few things or making a Google search to search about different topics.

✓ learning about a few things or making Google searches to learn about different topics.

'Few things' should be 'a few things' to indicate some. 'Making a Google search to search about' is redundant and awkward; better to say 'making Google searches to learn about'.

× It's really daunting to imagine a life without the Internet because everything around us is connected. An operates over the Internet.

✓ It's really daunting to imagine a life without the Internet because everything around us is connected and operates over the Internet.

The sentence 'An operates over the Internet.' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be combined with the previous sentence using 'and' to form a complete thought.