Internet— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez de répondre directement à la question avec une phrase simple, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

Exemplo: I started using the internet when I was about ten years old. At that time, I got my first smartphone, which allowed me to access the internet easily. It was an exciting experience because I could learn new things and communicate with my friends online.

Sugestão: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et manque de cohérence. Essayez d'organiser vos idées clairement et d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour connecter vos phrases. Soyez précis sur la fréquence et les activités en ligne.

Exemplo: I usually go online during my free time, especially on weekends and vacations. I use social media like Instagram to chat with my friends and watch TV shows on my phone. Although I am busy during the week, I try to stay connected online when I have time.

Sugestão: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais manque de fluidité et de précision. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour expliquer clairement la raison et le contexte.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember that during my exam period, I was not allowed to use the internet. This was because my parents wanted me to focus on studying without distractions, which helped me improve my results.

Sugestão: Votre réponse est honnête mais manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez de formuler vos idées clairement, en expliquant les problèmes et les solutions avec des phrases bien liées.

Exemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, mostly chatting with friends. Sometimes, it makes me bored or annoyed. To solve this, I plan to read books more often and spend time with my family on outings.

Sugestão: Votre réponse est incomplète et manque de fluidité. Essayez de répondre directement avec une phrase claire, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison.

Exemplo: Without the internet, I would spend more time doing sports and reading books. I find these activities exciting and beneficial for my health and knowledge.

× I remembered that I eat.

✓ I remember that I ate.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'remembered' (past tense) with 'eat' (present tense). The correct past tense of 'eat' is 'ate'. Also, 'remember' should be in present tense to match the context of recalling a past event.

× First time I used the Internet was when I got my first spot, my first, the phone.

✓ The first time I used the Internet was when I got my first phone.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Spot' is incorrect here and 'the phone' is misplaced. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× When I think the age of charity and I think when I wasn't to be the school and there was such a great fall experience for me.

✓ I think it was at the age of thirteen, and when I was in school, it was a great experience for me.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear phrasing. 'Think the age of charity' is incorrect; it should be 'at the age of thirteen'. Also, 'wasn't to be the school' is incorrect; it should be 'was in school'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I'm a busy time I get online rally but in my free time like in in the weekend or vacation I get online by watching is calling in the wheels of Instagram all talking or shut him with my friends or's watching this TV shows are CDs in my phone.

✓ When I'm busy, I rarely get online, but in my free time, like on weekends or during vacations, I get online to watch videos, scroll through Instagram, chat with my friends, or watch TV shows and listen to music on my phone.

The original sentence has multiple grammar and vocabulary errors, including misuse of quantifiers ('rally' instead of 'rarely'), incorrect prepositions, and unclear phrases. The correction improves clarity and grammar.

× I remembered the in the time that I was not allowed to use the Internet is when the during the period of exams that will that's sensitive weekend that could.

✓ I remember the time when I was not allowed to use the Internet during the exam period because it was a sensitive time.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'remembered' and has awkward phrasing. 'Remember' in present tense fits better when recalling a past event. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Affect my results so that I was not allowed to use the Internet because the IT could disturb me from advise and yeah.

✓ It could affect my results, so I was not allowed to use the Internet because it could distract me from studying.

The original sentence misuses conjunctions and has unclear phrases like 'disturb me from advise'. The correction uses appropriate conjunctions and clearer vocabulary.

× Yes, I definitely spend too much time online chatting with friends or what she does be honest and that problem I'm just get a boarding and just get annoyed from this program.

✓ Yes, I definitely spend too much time online chatting with friends or watching shows. To be honest, that's a problem; I just get bored and annoyed with these programs.

The sentence has multiple errors including incorrect words ('what she does', 'boarding') and awkward phrasing. The correction replaces incorrect words and improves sentence flow.

× Uh but I think I gotta find solution like reading book instead or just get with my family outing for journey and yes.

✓ But I think I need to find a solution, like reading books instead or going on outings with my family.

The original sentence uses informal and incorrect conjunctions and phrases ('gotta', 'get with my family outing for journey'). The correction uses proper conjunctions and clearer expressions.

× I'm definitely going to for sports or reading book because I find it very very like.

✓ I'm definitely going to play sports or read books because I find them very enjoyable.

The sentence incorrectly omits the verb after 'going to' and uses awkward phrasing. The correction adds the verb 'play' and improves clarity.

× Exciting and important is going to benefit me as well and.

✓ It is exciting and important and will benefit me as well.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb agreement. The correction adds 'It is' to clarify the subject and verb.