Science— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "+2", "sign screen") and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I have loved science since childhood, so I studied the science stream in higher secondary school and later completed a BSc in Nursing, which deepened my knowledge of biology and physiology.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then one clear supporting detail. Remove hesitations ("uh") and vague phrases. Use a linking word to show progression (e.g., "then", "later").

Exemplo: I started learning about science in primary school. For example, from kindergarten I studied basic environmental topics, and later progressed to more advanced science subjects through secondary school and college.

Sugestão: Answer directly and provide a specific reason and brief consequence. Avoid fillers and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, capitalization).

Exemplo: I find biology the most interesting because I am fascinated by human anatomy and physiology. Because of this interest, I chose to study nursing in college to gain practical experience in those areas.

Sugestão: This is a good answer; make it a bit more specific by naming one experiment or skill and use linking words to structure the response (e.g., "for example").

Exemplo: In school I attended regular lab classes in biology, physiology and chemistry. For example, in the chemistry simulation lab we carried out titration experiments to measure acidity, which I found especially fascinating because it taught me careful measurement and observation skills.

Sugestão: Be more precise about the type of programs (documentaries vs fiction) and give a brief reason or an example. Avoid vague claims like "many of the stories."

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy science-related TV, especially science fiction series on Netflix, because they explore futuristic ideas and inspire curiosity. For instance, I recently watched a series about space exploration that sparked my interest in astronomy.

Sugestão: Maintain politeness and answer as a general opinion if personal knowledge is limited. Start with a brief admission of limited experience, then offer a general, neutral response based on common knowledge or skip and ask for clarification politely.

Exemplo: I don't have personal experience with visitors from China, but generally science museums attract many international tourists, especially in large cities. However, if you mean people in India, I can say that many Indians do visit science museums, particularly families and school groups.

× Yes, science is my favorite subject and I was interested in science since I was a child and for that I took a mainstream science in my +2 and after that I did my graduation and BSc in nursing which is also a sign screen.

✓ Yes, science is my favorite subject and I have been interested in science since I was a child. Because of that I took the science stream in my 12th grade, and afterwards I graduated with a BSc in Nursing.

The student used 'was interested... since' which conflicts with 'since' and an ongoing interest; present perfect ('have been interested') is appropriate. 'Mainstream science in my +2' is unclear and unidiomatic; 'science stream in my 12th grade' is a clearer phrase. 'Did my graduation and BSc in nursing' is awkward; use 'graduated with a BSc in Nursing'. Use consistent tense for sequence of past events ('took... and afterwards I graduated'). Use present perfect for actions that started in the past and continue to present; use clearer noun phrases for education stages.

× Science has been the part of my education since primary school.

✓ Science has been part of my education since primary school.

The phrase 'the part' is incorrect here; 'part' without 'the' is natural after 'has been'. Use present perfect because the involvement of science began in the past and continues to now. Also 'has been part of my education' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'has been part of' or 'has been an important part of'.

× Starting from LKG uh we got a subject of environment, then followed by advanced level science as we grow up and uh till now I have been learning science in all aspects of my life.

✓ Starting from LKG we had an environmental subject, then later we studied advanced-level science as we grew up, and until now I have been learning science in all aspects of my life.

Mix of tenses and verb forms: 'got a subject of environment' is unidiomatic — use 'had an environmental subject'. 'followed by advanced level science as we grow up' mixes passive construction and present tense; convert to active past: 'then later we studied advanced-level science as we grew up'. Maintain tense consistency: past events ('had', 'studied', 'grew up') and present perfect for continuing action ('have been learning'). Suggestion: Keep past events in past tense and ongoing actions in present perfect.

× Biology was one of my favorite subject among science as I have interest in human anatomy and Physiology.

✓ Biology was one of my favorite subjects among the sciences because I have an interest in human anatomy and physiology.

'One of my favorite subject' is incorrect: use plural 'subjects' after 'one of'. 'Among science' should be 'among the sciences'. 'I have interest' requires an article: 'I have an interest' or 'I am interested in'. Capitalization: 'Physiology' should be lowercase unless at sentence start. Use 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct plural after 'one of' and proper collocations ('interested in' or 'have an interest in').

× Umm, it has captured my great interest since uh high school and after that I decided to pursue my higher studies in college and biology so I took BS in Nursing.

✓ It captured my great interest in high school, and after that I decided to pursue higher studies in college in biology, so I took a BSc in Nursing.

'Has captured... since high school' implies continuing action but the student then says they 'decided' (past), so simple past 'captured' fits the sequence. 'in college and biology' is awkward; specify 'in college in biology'. 'took BS in Nursing' should be 'took a BSc in Nursing' or 'pursued a BSc in Nursing'. Suggestion: Keep past narrative in simple past and use standard degree names and articles.

× While I was in science school, I had my lab classes where I was trained to do different practicals related to biology, Physiology, and chemistry.

✓ While I was in science school, I had lab classes where I was trained to do different practicals related to biology, physiology, and chemistry.

'my lab classes' is acceptable but 'lab classes' is more natural. 'Physiology' and 'chemistry' capitalization should be consistent and lowercase. No need for 'my' and 'practicals' is acceptable in some varieties but 'practical experiments' may be clearer. Article use: no article needed before 'lab classes'. Suggestion: Use consistent capitalization for subject names and prefer 'lab classes' or 'practical experiments'.

× The most interesting one was the chemistry simulation lab where we did experiment with chemicals and it was very fascinating.

✓ The most interesting was the chemistry simulation lab where we did experiments with chemicals, and it was very fascinating.

'Did experiment' is incorrect; plural noun 'experiments' is needed after 'did'. Alternatively, use 'conducted experiments' (past participle/verb phrase): 'where we conducted experiments with chemicals'. Maintain plural 'experiments' when multiple activities are implied. Suggestion: Use 'conducted experiments' for more formal phrasing and ensure noun-verb agreement.

× Yes, I love watching science TV programs especially when it comes to novels or series, I like watching them.

✓ Yes, I love watching science TV programs. Especially when it comes to novels or series, I enjoy watching them.

Run-on sentence; better split into two sentences. 'Especially when it comes to novels or series' is slightly odd: use 'especially science novels or series' or 'especially science fiction novels or series'. 'I like watching them' is repetitive; use 'I enjoy them' or 'I enjoy watching them'. Suggestion: Avoid run-on sentences and be specific ('science fiction series').

× How do I know about Chinese people? I haven't met a single Chinese person in my life and I have never been to China that I could give the answer of the story.

✓ How would I know about Chinese people? I haven't met a single Chinese person in my life, and I have never been to China, so I cannot answer that question.

'How do I know about Chinese people?' is better phrased as 'How would I know about Chinese people?' 'that I could give the answer of the story' is ungrammatical; replace with 'so I cannot answer that question'. Use proper conjunctions and modal verbs for ability/possibility. 'Give the answer of the story' is unclear and incorrect. Suggestion: Use 'so' to link cause and result and 'cannot answer that question' for clarity.

× You're asking this question in India. Can you please ask the people of India nonsense?

✓ You're asking this question in India. Can you please ask people in China or ask someone here in India who knows?

The original 'ask the people of India nonsense' is ungrammatical and rude. Likely intent was to suggest asking people in China; provide a polite alternative: 'ask people in China' or 'ask someone here who knows'. Use proper object phrases ('ask people in China') and avoid calling questions 'nonsense'. Suggestion: Rephrase to be polite and clear about who should be asked.