Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and reduce hesitations and repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid conflicting statements (e.g., "I was not able to ride... but I used to").

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father bought it for me when I passed a scholarship exam, and I clearly remember the excitement of receiving it. At first I couldn’t ride well, so he practiced with me every weekend until I became confident.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then support it with specific reasons and one example. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases. Use linking words like 'because', 'for example' and 'therefore' to make your response logical.

Exemplo: Not really. People here prefer cars because they see them as a status symbol and they are more convenient for long commutes. For example, many families own at least one car, so bicycles are mainly used for short trips or by children rather than for daily commuting.

× Of course, yes, I had a bike, uh, when I was a kid, but then, uh, I can remember that my father bought it it for me after, uh, passing this scholarship examination.

✓ Of course. I had a bike when I was a kid, and I remember that my father bought it for me after he passed a scholarship examination.

The student mixes past tense forms: 'had' and 'can remember' (present) are inconsistent for a past narrative. Use simple past for past events ('remember' -> 'remembered' or present 'I remember' can be used for a present recollection but here 'can remember' is awkward). Also 'it it' is a repetition and 'passing this scholarship examination' should be 'he passed a scholarship examination' to clarify the subject. Suggest using consistent past tense and removing repeated words.

× I can still remember the day that I got that for the first time.

✓ I can still remember the day I got it for the first time.

The sentence is mostly acceptable, but 'that' is awkward when referring to the bike; 'it' is clearer. 'I can still remember' is present tense used to state a current memory about a past event which is acceptable; no tense change needed. Suggest replacing 'that' with 'it' for natural reference.

× Back then, I was not able to ride the bicycle, but I used to.

✓ Back then, I was not able to ride the bicycle, but I used to try.

The phrase 'I used to' must be followed by a base verb to indicate a habitual past action (e.g., 'used to ride'). Here it contradicts 'was not able to ride' so likely the student meant they used to try or practice. If intending habitual riding, correct to 'but I used to ride it.' If intending attempts, 'used to try' is appropriate. Suggest clarifying intended meaning and completing the 'used to' construction with a verb.

× Well, not really, because people in my country are more inclined to have a car as their dream dream vehicle, so they don't not often use the bike for the everyday commu commute purposes.

✓ Well, not really, because people in my country are more inclined to dream of having a car as their ideal vehicle, so they don't often use a bike for everyday commute purposes.

Multiple issues: double negative 'don't not often' is incorrect—use 'don't often'. Repetition 'dream dream' and 'commu commute' are duplications. 'Are more inclined to have a car as their dream vehicle' is awkward; better 'are more inclined to dream of having a car' or 'consider a car their ideal vehicle'. Also use 'a bike' or 'bikes' consistently; here singular 'a bike' fits. Suggest removing repetitions, correcting double negative, and rephrasing for natural collocation.

× So I don't think that umm bikes are more popular in my country.

✓ So I don't think bikes are very popular in my country.

The original 'are more popular' is comparative but no comparison target is given; it's better to state directly 'are very popular' or 'are more popular than other transport' with a comparison. 'umm' is filler and should be removed in written answers. Suggest removing hesitation and using a clearer adjective or providing the comparison target if intended.