Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “gave me a choice/condition” → “gave me a choice,” and keep tense consistent). Limit to 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition like “remember… remember.”

Exemplo: I did. I got my first bike when I was eight because my father gave me a choice between a TV, some games, or a bike, and I chose the bike. After that I spent every afternoon exploring the neighborhood and learning new tricks. That bike started my love of cycling.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons or examples and use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because,” “therefore”). Avoid vague or biased phrases like “emotional role in a man's life”; be more neutral and precise about who rides bikes and why. Also fix grammar (e.g., “people aged 18 to 25” and “fond of riding bikes”).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people aged 18 to 25 prefer motorcycles and scooters because they are affordable and convenient for commuting. In addition, bicycles are common in cities for short trips, so overall two-wheel transport is very widespread.

× Yes, I remember when I was 8 I got my first bike and even remember my father gave me a condition whether to buy a TV, to play games or to buy a bike and that time I chose bike.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was eight I got my first bike, and I also remember my father giving me a choice: whether to buy a TV, to play games, or to buy a bike; at that time I chose the bike.

The original sentence has issues with sentence structure, verb forms, and article use. 'gave me a condition' is unnatural; 'giving me a choice' or 'gave me a choice' is correct. After 'remember' use of parallel -ing form ('I also remember my father giving...') or change the clause to past simple consistently ('I also remember that my father gave me a choice'). Numbers under ten are usually written as words ('eight'). 'that time I chose bike' needs the definite article 'the' before 'bike'. Use punctuation or conjunctions to separate ideas for clarity. Suggestion: break the long sentence into clearer parts and keep verb forms parallel.

× I think bikes are popular in my country, like seeing people aging 18 to 25 are most fond of riding bikes as bikes play a very emotional role in a man's life.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country; for example, people aged 18 to 25 are especially fond of riding them because bikes play a very emotional role in many people's lives.

The original has tense and word-choice errors: 'seeing people aging 18 to 25' is incorrect. Use 'people aged 18 to 25' (adjective phrase) or 'people between 18 and 25 years old'. 'are most fond of riding bikes' is acceptable but 'especially fond of riding them' is smoother and avoids repetition. 'a man's life' is gender-specific and odd here; 'many people's lives' is more natural. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent present-tense statements. Suggestion: use 'people aged...' and avoid repeating 'bikes' unnecessarily; use pronouns for clarity.