Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating what you had, then add one or two specific details (age, who gave it, where you rode it). Avoid filler words and repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (for example, “also” or “when”).

Exemplo: Yes. I had a tricycle when I was very young, and later I got a small, medium-sized bicycle when I was about seven. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends, and my parents taught me how to balance and brake.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, “because,” “for example,” “so”) to make your answer coherent. Avoid vague phrases like “most of the things of my age.” Be concise — 2–3 sentences is enough.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many children ride bikes to school and adults use them for quick errands in their neighborhoods, so cycling is an everyday activity for many people.

× A tricycle, uh, another small like a medium sized bike, a road, everything I can improve everything.

✓ A tricycle and later a small to medium-sized road bike; I used whatever I could improve on.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear, lacking proper connectors and containing redundant phrases. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: connect related ideas with conjunctions or punctuation, remove redundancy ('everything' repeated), and use clear noun phrases ('small to medium-sized road bike').

× Here, I guess it's quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I guess bikes are quite popular in my country.

The original sentence uses 'it' vaguely and omits the subject 'bikes', causing ambiguity. This is a present tense / clarity issue (ID 6). Use the explicit subject 'bikes' and present tense 'are' to match the question about general popularity.

× Uh, most of the things of my age were here in my childhood.

✓ When I was a child, most people my age had bikes where I grew up.

The phrase 'most of the things of my age were here in my childhood' is ungrammatical and unclear — a sentence structure error (ID 26). Rephrase to specify 'people my age' and provide location/time frame: 'When I was a child, most people my age had bikes where I grew up.'

× A lot of people rode them on roads, on their streets, etcetera.

✓ A lot of people rode them on the roads and on their own streets.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs articles and possessive clarity. This is a past tense issue (ID 5) combined with article/possessive improvement: use 'the roads' and 'their own streets' for natural English. Keep past tense 'rode' to match the past timeframe.

× So yeah, it was fun.

✓ So yeah, it was fun to ride bikes.

'It was fun' is short and acceptable, but vague; adding 'to ride bikes' clarifies what 'it' refers to. This is a sentence structure/clarity issue (ID 26). Explicitly state the activity for better coherence.