Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve accuracy, grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and vocabulary (bike, not bite), and use concise supporting details. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words such as “but” or “so.” For example, say when you had the bike, how you used it, and why you no longer have it. Check tenses: use past for childhood facts and present for current situation.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was in sixth grade, and I used it to ride to school every day. However, I no longer have that bike because I now own a motorcycle and usually travel by motorbike instead.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words such as “however,” “because,” or “for example.” Avoid filler words (umm, like) and unclear phrases (“available for some”). Use present simple when stating general trends and compare past and present clearly.

Exemplo: I think bicycles were more popular about ten years ago, but their use has declined. Nowadays many people prefer cars or motorbikes because they are faster and more comfortable; for example, only some schoolchildren still cycle to school in smaller towns.

× Yet I have a bite when I was a child and I was in grade 6 and I used to travel to school by bike but now I'm no longer obtain any one of them as I have my own motorcycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was in grade 6 and I used to travel to school by bike, but now I no longer have any of them because I have my own motorcycle.

Multiple errors: 'Yet' is incorrect discourse marker; replace with 'Yes'. 'have a bite' is wrong words and tense; should be 'had a bike' (past). 'obtain any one of them' is incorrect verb choice and grammar — use 'have any of them'. The sentence contained run-on structure; split into two sentences and add 'because' for cause. Suggestion: use correct past tense for past possession, choose appropriate verbs (have), and break long sentences into clear clauses.

× Umm, I think it's popular umm during like the last decade, but now people prefer to travel by car or any motorbike and it's only available for some secondary or primary students now to use the bike.

✓ Umm, I think bikes were popular during the last decade, but now people prefer to travel by car or motorcycle, and bicycles are mainly used by some primary and secondary students.

Tense mismatch: 'I think it's popular during the last decade' mixes present belief with past time; use past tense 'were popular' when referring to the last decade. 'Any motorbike' is awkward; use 'motorcycle'. 'It's only available for some ... students now to use the bike' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'bicycles are mainly used by some primary and secondary students' to use correct subject, tense and noun form. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions, choose precise nouns, and use passive or active constructions clearly for general statements.