Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Work on clear grammar, correct word choice, and concise structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct key vocabulary (bike, not Pike) and avoid unnecessary words. Also fix tense and subject-verb agreement and remove unclear adjectives (e.g., "frightened" is wrong here).

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it every afternoon with my friends around our neighborhood, and we often raced along the park path. Because I practiced daily, I became confident riding on busy streets later.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific details and linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement: "they are popular"), remove repetition, and use precise age range language. Add reasons or examples to strengthen the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many children aged about 7 to 16 ride bikes to school because it is cheap and convenient, and in some cities cycling is encouraged by safe bike lanes.

× Yes, I had a Pike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence has missing article 'a' before 'child' and a capitalization/typo: 'Pike' should be 'bike'. This is a sentence structure and article error. Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'child' and correct 'Pike' to 'bike'. Suggestion: Use 'a child' for singular countable noun and check capitalization/typos.

× It was frightened and I used it if every afternoon around to ride around near neighborhood with my friends.

✓ It was flimsy and I used it every afternoon to ride around the neighborhood with my friends.

Multiple issues: 'frightened' describes a living thing, not an inanimate object; 'used it if' is incorrect (extraneous 'if'); word order 'every afternoon around' is awkward; missing article 'the' before 'neighborhood'. Classified primarily as adjective/adverb misuse and sentence structure errors. Suggestions: Use appropriate adjectives for objects (e.g., 'flimsy', 'old', 'red'), remove unnecessary words ('if'), place time expressions ('every afternoon') correctly, and include articles where needed ('the neighborhood'). Alternative depending on intended meaning: 'It was frightening' (if the bike scared the rider) or 'It was frightened' should not be used for a bike.

× Yes it is popular because everyone everyone use it.

✓ Yes, it is popular because everyone uses it.

Subject-verb agreement and repetition errors: 'everyone' is singular and requires the third-person singular verb form 'uses', not 'use'. Also 'everyone' is repeated twice. This fits present tense and subject-verb agreement issues. Suggestion: Use 'everyone uses' and avoid repeated words.

× Especially who who the young between between 7 years to 15 or 16.

✓ Especially those who are young, between 7 and 16 years old.

The sentence repeats words ('who who', 'between between') and lacks a correct pronoun structure. 'Who' alone is not correct here; use 'those who are' to refer to people. Also use 'between 7 and 16 years old' rather than 'to 15 or 16'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure. Suggestions: Remove repetitions, use 'those who are' and the idiomatic 'between X and Y years old'.