Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence and then add one concise supporting detail. Correct verb tenses and possessive forms, and avoid filler words like “so.” For example, say when you received the bike and one brief detail about it or how you felt. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as “because” or “when.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for my twelfth birthday, and I rode it to visit friends around the neighborhood because it made me feel independent.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No) and then give specific reasons using correct grammar. Replace hesitant fillers and unclear words; use linking phrases like “because” or “however.” Be specific about who uses motorbikes and why (cost, convenience, speed). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really — bicycles are less common. Most people prefer motorbikes for commuting because they are faster and more convenient for long distances and heavy traffic.

× So I'm when I'm a little girl, so I have a bike that's my which my mom bought for me is in my 12th birthday.

✓ When I was a little girl, I had a bike that my mom bought me for my 12th birthday.

Errors: incorrect tense (used present 'I'm' and 'have' when speaking about the past) and awkward word order ('that's my which ... is in my 12th birthday'). Correction changes verbs to past tense to match the time reference ('was', 'had', 'bought') and simplifies the relative clause to 'that my mom bought me for my 12th birthday'. Suggestion: Identify time markers (e.g. 'when I was') and use past tense consistently; use 'bought me for my 12th birthday' instead of literal word-for-word constructions.

× So I think that not really.

✓ I don't think so.

Error: incorrect sentence structure and tense/auxiliary use for negative opinion in present ('I don't think so' is the correct present-tense negative form). Suggestion: Use the auxiliary 'do' + not + base verb for present simple negatives: 'I don't think so.'

× So I think many people are always bring right the motorbikes to their work and sturdy because it's provide great freedoms and.

✓ I think many people always ride motorbikes to work because they provide great freedom.

Multiple errors: wrong verb form 'are always bring' should be 'always ride' (use base verb with adverb for habitual action); extraneous words 'right' and 'sturdy' are incorrect; wrong pronoun/verb agreement 'it's provide' should be 'they provide'; 'freedoms' is better as uncountable 'freedom' here. Suggestion: For habitual actions use present simple with adverb placement ('many people always ride'); ensure subject-verb agreement (plural 'they provide'); choose correct vocabulary ('ride motorbikes to work', 'freedom' as a mass noun).