Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, use correct verb forms and tenses, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (age when you learned, who taught you, or a memorable moment). Use linking words like 'then' or 'after that' correctly. Watch for common mistakes: say 'when I was a child' (not 'when I had a little kid'), 'my father bought it for me', 'I learned to ride it at about four or five', and 'later he bought me a bigger bike.'

Exemplo: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me, and I learned to ride it when I was about four or five years old. Then, after I grew taller, he bought me a bigger bike, which I used to practice tricks in the park.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with two clear, specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and filler words (uh, um). Use linking phrases like 'because' and 'for example' to structure your answer. Use more precise vocabulary: 'popular', 'common', 'children', 'exercise', 'outdoors', 'distracted by technology'. A concise answer of 2–3 sentences is enough.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children use them for fun and exercise. For example, parents often encourage kids to ride outside so they get fresh air and spend less time on phones, which helps their health.

× Yes, of course I had a little bike when I had a little kid.

✓ Yes, of course I had a small bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'had a little kid' is incorrect because a child cannot be 'had' by someone; the speaker means they themselves were a child. Also 'little bike' is acceptable but 'small bike' is more natural. Replace 'had a little kid' with 'was a child' to correct meaning and grammar.

× My father bought a bought it for me.

✓ My father bought it for me.

There is a duplicated word 'bought'. Remove the extra word. The past tense 'bought' correctly matches the time frame, so no tense change is needed.

× I learned how to to dive it when I was a younger age, as four years old, five years old maybe.

✓ I learned how to ride it when I was younger, maybe four or five years old.

There are several issues: 'to to' is a duplication; 'dive' is the wrong verb — 'ride' is correct for bicycles; 'a younger age' and 'as four years old' are incorrect constructions. Use 'when I was younger' and 'maybe four or five years old' to express age correctly.

× Then after I go up, my father bought me another big an another bigger bike.

✓ Then, after I grew up, my father bought me another, bigger bike.

Mixes present tense 'go up' with past 'bought'. Use past 'grew up' to match 'bought'. Also fix 'another big an another bigger' to 'another, bigger bike' for correct comparative and article use.

× So for me.

✓ So that was my experience.

'So for me.' is a sentence fragment lacking clear structure and a verb. Replace with a full sentence that conveys meaning, such as 'So that was my experience.'.

× Of course, uh, bikes are, uh, popular my contact because it is, uh, you can say it is a sports where kids, uh, can have it.

✓ Of course, bikes are popular in my country because you could say they are a sport that children can take part in.

Problems: 'my contact' should be 'my country'; 'it is a sports' should be 'they are a sport' or 'it is a sport' but bicycles as an activity fit 'they are a sport' or 'cycling is a sport'; 'where kids can have it' is awkward—use 'children can take part in' or 'children can practice'. Adjust prepositions and noun agreement accordingly.

× So they can, they can, uh, not give attention to much for technologies or phone so they can make, play with it, make sport with it.

✓ So they do not pay much attention to technology or phones, and they can play with them and do sports.

Pronoun and verb usage problems: 'give attention to much for technologies or phone' is incorrect; use 'do not pay much attention to technology or phones'. 'Play with it, make sport with it' mismatches singular/plural; use 'play with them and do sports' to match plural 'phones' and activities.

× So it is a, a healthy thing for, for kids.

✓ So it is a healthy activity for kids.

Redundant 'a, a' and 'thing' is vague. Use 'a healthy activity' which is more natural. Remove duplicate words and extra commas.