Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unfinished phrases and minor grammar errors (e.g., tense and word order). Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

Exemplo: Yes, I did — I had a pink bicycle when I was a child. I felt very excited when my parents bought it, because it had a small basket and shiny streamers on the handlebars. Because I practised every day, I quickly became confident riding it around the neighbourhood.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and use grammatically correct sentences. Give a clear reason and one specific detail or example, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'we are a developing country' not 'I still are'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because we are a developing nation and many people need an affordable way to travel. For example, labourers and students often use bikes for short daily journeys since they are cheap to run and easy to park.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child and I feel very nostalgic remembering that.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I feel very nostalgic remembering that.

Use simple past without auxiliary 'did' for affirmative past statements. 'Did have' is unnecessary; say 'I had' to be grammatically correct and natural in this context.

× I was so much curious and excited when we went to buy the bike.

✓ I was very curious and excited when we went to buy the bike.

'So much curious' is unidiomatic. Use 'very' or 'so' before adjectives: 'very curious' or 'so curious'. 'So much' typically modifies verbs or nouns, not adjectives.

× I remember it was pink in colour with the basket and I.

✓ I remember it was pink in colour with a basket.

The sentence ends with an incomplete phrase 'and I.' Remove the incomplete part and use 'a basket' (indefinite article) to correctly describe the bike. Also 'in colour' is acceptable but optional; 'pink' alone suffices.

× Yes, they are very popular in my country because you know, and I still are developing country and there are lots and lots of labourers, uh, which aren't day-to-day.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country because, you know, we are still a developing country and there are lots and lots of labourers who work day-to-day.

Multiple issues: 'I still are developing country' has wrong subject and verb and missing article — should be 'we are still a developing country.' 'Which aren't day-to-day' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'who work day-to-day' to describe labourers. Use 'who' for people and correct verb phrase 'work day-to-day.' Also add commas for clarity.

× So they usually prefer bike for travelling because it is cost effective plus they couldn't afford.

✓ So they usually prefer bikes for travelling because it is cost-effective and they cannot afford cars.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Prefer bike for travelling' should be 'prefer bikes for travelling.' 'Cost effective' should be hyphenated as 'cost-effective' when used as a compound adjective. 'Plus they couldn't afford' is incomplete; specify what they cannot afford, e.g., 'they cannot afford cars.' Use 'cannot' (or 'couldn't' if referring to past) consistently with present tense context.