Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and fix grammar; begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and avoid filler words (uh, umm). For example, say when you first learned, who you rode with, where you rode, and one brief memory or reason why you enjoyed it.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I first learned to ride it when I was ten, and I often rode with my sister on weekends. We usually cycled around the block near our apartment, and I remember feeling proud the first time I managed a long downhill without stopping.

Sugestão: Make a direct statement, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and finish sentences fully. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "bike-sharing schemes," "cycling lanes").

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Singapore. Firstly, there are many bike-sharing schemes and convenient rental services, so people can easily use bikes for short trips. Secondly, the city is compact and has many cycling paths, which makes riding a practical and efficient way to get around.

× I remembered that I first rode my bike, uh, on when I was 10, umm, together with my sister and during the weekends, umm, we will ride the bike umm, downstairs at our block.

✓ I remember that I first rode my bike when I was 10, together with my sister, and during the weekends we would ride our bikes downstairs at our block.

The student mixed past simple, past remembered form, and a future/modal 'will' in a narration about past habitual actions. Use simple present 'remember' to report a memory and simple past 'rode' for the specific past event. For habitual past actions, use 'would' or 'used to' rather than 'will'. Also corrected unnecessary filler words and made plural agreement for 'bikes'. Suggestion: say 'I remember that I first rode my bike when I was 10' and 'we would ride our bikes on weekends.'

× In Singapore, all bikes are popular in our country because every umm transport is quite convenient, so we do have bikes for rental uh, to go from one point to the other.

✓ In Singapore, bikes are popular because public transport is very convenient, so we also have bikes for rental to go from one point to another.

The original uses awkward pronouns and determiners ('all bikes', 'our country', 'every transport') and word order. 'All bikes are popular in our country' is redundant; use 'bikes are popular'. 'Every transport' is incorrect; use 'public transport' or 'transport is'. Replaced 'to go from one point to the other' with the idiomatic 'from one point to another'. Also simplified fillers. Suggestion: use 'public transport is very convenient' and 'bikes for rental' or 'rental bikes.'

× And since Singapore is so small, we can actually ride from.

✓ And since Singapore is so small, we can actually ride across it.

The sentence is incomplete and missing an object after 'ride from.' To express the idea of traveling across the country by bike, say 'ride across it' or 'ride from one end to the other.' Suggestion: complete the sentence with a clear object, e.g. 'ride across it' or 'ride from one end of the island to the other.'