Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), shorten and organise into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details, and correct vocabulary and word order. Use linking words for clarity and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a simple past topic sentence, then add a reason and a brief description with correct verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it everywhere because it gave me freedom, and I loved the feeling of the wind on my face when I pedalled along the road.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and fix sentence clarity and word choice. State your opinion clearly, give one or two specific reasons, and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Check grammar (e.g., ‘electric’ not ‘electronic’, ‘ride’ not ‘riding’ in that position) and remove redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially electric bikes. Many people use them because they are convenient for short trips in busy cities, and they are cheaper than cars and easy to park.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and I go everywhere where I want with the bike and I like the feeling that the wind Passover me when I riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I went everywhere I wanted with it, and I liked the feeling of the wind passing over me when I rode my bike.

Errors: mixed present and past tenses (use past to describe childhood), incorrect verb forms, unnecessary repetition, incorrect phrase 'Passover' and 'when I riding'. Suggestions: Use past tense consistently (had, went, wanted, liked, rode), use 'passing over' as present participle after 'feeling of', and use 'my bike' or 'it' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people use electronic bikes nowadays.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people use electric bikes nowadays.

Error: 'electronic bikes' is not the usual collocation; 'electric bikes' or 'e-bikes' is correct. Tense 'think' and 'nowadays' are fine. Suggestion: Replace 'electronic' with 'electric' or 'e-bikes' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So yeah, I can see many people when I many people riding a electronic bike when I walk the road because it's inconvenient.

✓ So yeah, I can see many people riding electric bikes when I walk along the road because it is convenient for them.

Errors: redundant phrase 'when I many people', incorrect article 'a' before plural, awkward clause order, and wrong reason 'because it's inconvenient' which conflicts with observation; original likely meant bikes are convenient. Suggestions: Remove redundancy, use plural 'electric bikes', use 'walk along the road', and make the reason coherent (e.g., 'because it is convenient for them'). Grammar problem type ID: 26