Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small errors (e.g. “bag” likely meant “bike”) and avoid irrelevant fragments. Keep under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g. ‘learned to ride’, ‘scared’, ‘fell’).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about seven, and my father taught me. At first I was scared and I fell a few times, which hurt, but I kept practising and soon I became confident.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid fillers. Begin with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. ‘because’, ‘for example’). Use accurate expressions (‘in China’, ‘shared bikes’, ‘commuting’) and avoid contradictory words like ‘luxury’ unless explained. Limit to maximum five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, they are very popular in China because shared bikes are convenient and affordable. For example, many people use bike-sharing apps to commute short distances, and this reduces traffic and saves money.

× When I was a child. I had a bag and I remember there was a time my father told me how to ride.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike and I remember a time when my father taught me how to ride.

The original contains a sentence fragment ('When I was a child.') and uses 'bag' likely meant 'bike'. 'There was a time my father told me how to ride' is awkward; use 'a time when' and change 'told me how to ride' to 'taught me how to ride' for clarity. Also ensure sentences are combined correctly with a comma and subordinate clause. Suggested improvement: combine clauses, replace incorrect noun, and use 'taught' for conveying instruction.

× I felt so bad and I hurt myself.

✓ I felt so bad and hurt myself.

Repeating the subject 'I' is unnecessary in coordinated verbs; however the main issue is punctuation and natural phrasing. Both verbs are correctly in past tense, but streamlining improves fluency: 'I felt so bad and hurt myself.' Suggested improvement: avoid redundant subjects in coordinated verbs.

× Yes, it definitely, umm, does so I can form China and umm, people in China uh, often use uh, shared bike uh, for commuting and uh, uh, luxury.

✓ Yes, definitely. In China, people often use shared bikes for commuting and leisure.

Multiple problems: 'it definitely, umm, does' is unnecessary and ungrammatical; 'I can form China' is incorrect phrasing; 'shared bike' needs plural 'bikes'; 'luxury' is the wrong word here—'leisure' or 'recreation' fits. The corrected sentence fixes subject-verb flow and uses plural noun for general reference. Use 'In China, people often use shared bikes for commuting and leisure.' Suggested improvement: remove filler words, use correct prepositional phrase 'In China', pluralize 'bikes' for general statements, and choose correct vocabulary ('leisure').