Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and remove filler words. For example, say you loved riding as a child, mention who gave the bike and describe it briefly with clear adjectives and one consequence or feeling.

Exemplo: Yes. I loved riding when I was a child, so my father bought me a bright red bicycle for my birthday. It had shiny chrome fenders and a small bell, which made it feel special. As a result, my friends often asked to borrow it and I felt very proud.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct articles and singular/plural forms, and link supporting points logically. Provide specific reasons and an example or brief comparison. Avoid filler words and pronunciation imitations like 'yum'.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. They are an eco-friendly and inexpensive way to commute, and they also provide good exercise. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic and save on fuel costs, and cycling lanes make it easier to meet neighbours on the way.

× Yes, I love bicycling while I was a child so my dad just purchased a bike for me for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I loved bicycling when I was a child, so my dad purchased a bike for me for my birthday.

Mixing present tense 'love' with past time reference 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Also replace 'while' with 'when' for a more natural time expression and remove 'just' if not necessary. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with the time expression.

× It was red. Bright red bike umm with some no decorated colors.

✓ It was red. A bright red bike with some simple decorations.

Sentence lacks article before 'bright red bike' and contains ungrammatical fragment 'no decorated colors'. Add the indefinite article 'a' and replace the fragment with 'with some simple decorations' to produce a grammatical noun phrase. Ensure adjectives precede the noun in correct order.

× People envy me have such a bike.

✓ People envied me for having such a bike.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and tense. 'People envy me have' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'envied' to match recounting a past event and the phrase 'for having' to express the cause of envy. Alternatively, 'People were envious of me because I had such a bike.'

× Yum bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

'Yum' is not a pronoun and seems to be a misheard or mistyped word. Replace with 'Yes' to respond affirmatively. Ensure pronouns or interjections are appropriate for the context.

× It's a eco friendly way to like commute and also a good way to exercise.

✓ It's an eco-friendly way to commute and also a good way to exercise.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound ('eco'), not 'a'. Hyphenate 'eco-friendly' as a compound adjective and remove the filler 'like'. Ensure infinitive 'to commute' is used without extra particles.

× And it's much cheaper than owning a cars and and in many ways it's a good way to communicate with people why they were around.

✓ And it's much cheaper than owning a car, and in many ways it's a good way to communicate with people who are around.

Use singular 'a car' after 'owning' because 'owning a cars' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove duplicate 'and and'. Change 'why they were around' to 'who are around' to correctly refer to people present; use 'who' as relative pronoun and present tense 'are' if speaking generally. Also add a comma for clarity.