Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and the incomplete final sentence. Use past simple consistently and a small range of precise vocabulary (e.g., "present" → "presented me with" or simply "bought me").

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small white bike when I was five, and I remember practicing in our driveway every afternoon. However, despite trying many times, I couldn't master balancing until I was a bit older, so I kept practicing with training wheels.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Improve grammar ("compared with the past", "use bikes a lot", "to reduce pollution"). Add a concrete example or short statistic if possible to make it specific.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are more popular now than in the past. For example, many young people cycle to work and university to stay fit and avoid traffic, and local councils have built bike lanes to encourage this, which also helps reduce air pollution.

× When I was five years old, my father bought a present for me that was a white bike.

✓ When I was five years old, my father bought me a white bike.

The phrasing 'bought a present for me that was a white bike' is awkward rather than strictly ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure issue and also relates to natural past-tense phrasing. Use the simple past 'bought' (which is already correct) but change the object order to 'bought me a white bike' for idiomatic English and conciseness. Suggestion: place the indirect object ('me') before the direct object ('a white bike').

× Unfortunately, I tried a lot to learn how to ride a bike, but I couldn't.

✓ Unfortunately, I tried hard to learn how to ride a bike, but I couldn't.

The verb 'tried' is correctly in the past tense, but the phrase 'tried a lot' is unnatural. Use 'tried hard' or 'made many attempts' to express effort. Keep the past tense 'couldn't' for inability in the past. Suggestion: replace 'tried a lot' with 'tried hard' or 'made many attempts'.

× And it was.

✓ And I still couldn't ride it.

'And it was' is a fragment and does not convey a clear meaning. This is a sentence structure error: sentences must have a subject and verb and be clear in context. The student likely meant they still could not ride the bike, so provide a complete clause: 'And I still couldn't ride it.' Suggestion: always include a clear subject and verb and ensure the clause connects logically to the previous sentence.

× In comparison with past, these days people, especially young people, try to use bike a lot because of having a healthy lifestyle and reduce the use of transportation in order to reduce the pollution.

✓ Compared with the past, these days people, especially young people, try to use bikes a lot to maintain a healthy lifestyle and to reduce the use of motorized transportation in order to lower pollution.

Multiple issues: 'In comparison with past' is incorrect preposition and article usage; use 'Compared with the past' or 'Compared to the past'. 'Use bike' needs plural 'bikes' (singular/plural issue) and 'use' with 'to' purpose clauses. 'Because of having a healthy lifestyle' is awkward; use 'to maintain a healthy lifestyle'. 'Reduce the use of transportation' is vague—'motorized transportation' is clearer. Also 'reduce the pollution' should be 'lower pollution' or 'reduce pollution'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('compared with'), correct plural nouns ('bikes'), and purpose infinitives ('to maintain', 'to reduce') for clarity.