Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use past simple consistently and avoid fillers like “uh.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was five years old and learned to ride it in the park near my home. After that, I rode it to school several times a week, which helped me become more confident and independent.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion, use accurate grammar and avoid unsubstantiated statistics. Use linking words to add a reason or example and correct noun/verb forms (ride a bike).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities like Yokohama. For example, many people commute by bike because it is faster than public transport for short distances, and there are many bike lanes that make cycling safe.

× Yes, I had a bike, uh, when I was a child, Uh, uh, the first time when I was five years old. Uh, it's my first time.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The first time was when I was five years old.

The student mixes past tense and present tense and uses redundant filler words. 'I had a bike' and 'was five years old' should both be simple past. The phrase 'it's my first time' is present tense and inappropriate; replace with 'The first time was when I was five years old.' Also remove unnecessary fillers (uh) and redundant wording for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use concise sentences. (grammar_problem_type_id:5)

× Yes, it's really popular in my country, especially in Yokohama. Uh. 70% of the people who live in Yokohama ride in bike I think.

✓ Yes, they are really popular in my country, especially in Yokohama. I think about 70% of the people who live in Yokohama ride bikes.

The student used 'it's' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), which is incorrect pronoun agreement; use 'they are'. Also the phrase 'ride in bike' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike'. Place 'I think' before the statistic or set it off with commas for clarity. Suggestion: match pronoun number with the noun (bikes -> they) and use proper verb-object collocation 'ride bikes'. (grammar_problem_type_id:12)