Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, give specific details (age, who gifted it), use correct grammar (tenses, articles, numbers) and avoid fillers/repetition. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences and connect ideas with simple linking words (for example, "because", "and", "so").

Exemplo: Yes. I got my first bike when I was 17. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I used it a lot until I moved overseas a few years later.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and linking words to organize thoughts ("because", "for example", "also"). Avoid vague phrases and unfinished sentences. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many teenage boys enjoy riding them with friends. For example, teenagers often race or go on group rides on weekends, and bikes are an affordable way to socialise and get around.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child so at the age of 17 approx.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, until I was about 17.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before 'child' and uses 'at the age of 17 approx.' awkwardly. Use 'a child' for correct noun phrase. 'At the age of 17' is better expressed as 'until I was about 17' to show the duration; 'approx.' should be written in words as 'about'. Keep past tense consistent.

× So my father gifted to me as my birthday gift.

✓ My father gave it to me as a birthday gift.

English verbs like 'give' do not take 'to' before the indirect object when the indirect object follows the verb (my father gave me). Also 'gifted to me' is less natural; use 'gave it to me' or 'gave me'. Remove redundant article 'my' before 'birthday gift' or use 'a birthday gift'.

× So that's why I, I had my bike since I was UH-19.

✓ So that's why I had my bike since I was 19.

When using 'since' with a specific point in time, the present perfect is usually required (I have had my bike since I was 19) if you still have it; if speaking about a past period that ended, use 'from when I was 19' or 'since I was 19' with context. Also remove filler 'UH' and duplicate 'I, I'. Use numerals or words consistently: '19' is fine.

× Then I, I just uh, like gone overseas.

✓ Then I just went overseas.

The phrase 'like gone' is ungrammatical. Use the past simple 'went' to match 'Then' and the past narrative. Remove filler words 'uh' and duplicate 'I, I'.

× Guess bikes are very popular back to my home country because all the teenager boys they like bikes because when their teenager they have their all the childhood friends.

✓ I guess bikes are very popular in my home country because many teenage boys like them; when they are teenagers, they often spend time with their childhood friends.

Multiple problems: missing subject 'I' for 'Guess', preposition 'in' not 'back to', 'teenager boys' should be 'teenage boys', redundant 'they' after 'boys', verb tense and form 'when their teenager' should be 'when they are teenagers'. Use 'many' instead of 'all' unless certain. Also replace 'like bikes' with 'like them' to avoid repetition.

× So they go with the bikes racing and other stuff as well and they go as.

✓ So they go bike racing and do other activities together as well.

'Go with the bikes racing' is incorrect. Use 'go bike racing' or 'race bikes'. 'Other stuff' is informal; use 'other activities'. The trailing 'and they go as' is incomplete and should be removed or completed; here it's replaced with 'together as well' to convey meaning.