Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammatical errors, avoid repetition, and keep sentences short (max 4–5). Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly. For example, replace unclear phrases (‘very productive’, ‘dry cycle’) with accurate ones (‘overprotective’, ‘ride a bicycle’).

Exemplo: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child. My mother was very overprotective and thought our neighborhood was unsafe, so she didn't allow me to ride outside alone.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague wording and fix sentence structure (subject-verb agreement, articles, and word choice). Use precise phrases like ‘due to high population density’ and ‘because many people cannot afford cars’.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. This is partly due to high population density and partly because rising inflation makes cars unaffordable for many people, so bicycles are a cheap and practical alternative.

× No, I didn't have a bicycle because my mom was very productive.

✓ No, I didn't have a bicycle because my mom was very protective.

The student used 'productive' incorrectly; 'productive' means producing a lot, not relating to concern for safety. The intended meaning is that the mother was cautious or protective. Use 'protective' or 'overprotective' depending on degree. Suggestion: replace 'productive' with 'protective' or 'overprotective' to convey concern for the child's safety.

× She she thought that the neighborhood was unsafe, so she didn't want me riding outside the home alone.

✓ She thought that the neighborhood was unsafe, so she didn't want me to ride outside the home alone.

There is a repeated 'she' (typo) and an incorrect verb form 'riding' after 'want' without 'to'. After verbs like 'want', use the infinitive 'to ride' when expressing desire about someone else's action. Also 'ride' is more natural than 'riding' in this structure. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'she' and use 'to ride'.

× So I really don't a dry cycle.

✓ So I really didn't have a bicycle.

The sentence is ungrammatical: 'don't a dry cycle' contains wrong auxiliary and incorrect words. The context is past tense ('didn't have' earlier), so maintain past: 'I really didn't have a bicycle.' 'Dry cycle' is likely a phonetic error; replace with 'bicycle'. Suggestion: use correct past negative form 'didn't have' and the correct noun 'bicycle'.

× Yeah, it is very popular in our country because of population.

✓ Yeah, they are very popular in our country because of the population.

The student used 'it is' to refer to 'bikes' (plural). For plural subjects use 'they are'. Also add 'the' before 'population' to refer to the country's population. Suggestion: match subject number and use 'the population'.

× We have a 5th largest population in the world and also rising inflation is the main cause of having bicycles, bikes because many people are not afford cars and their.

✓ We have the fifth largest population in the world, and rising inflation is a main reason people own bicycles because many people cannot afford cars.

Multiple issues: use ordinal 'fifth' not '5th' in formal speech and include 'the' before the ordinal. 'Main cause of having bicycles' is awkward; use 'a main reason people own bicycles'. 'Not afford cars and their' is incorrect—use 'cannot afford cars'. Also remove the stray 'their'. Suggestion: use 'the fifth largest population', 'a main reason', and 'cannot afford cars' for clarity and correct grammar.