Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences. For example, use past simple (‘I had’) and correct verb forms (‘I rode’).

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it everywhere with my friends, especially to the park and around our neighborhood. Those times were very happy because we spent hours racing and exploring new streets together.

Sugestão: Clarify the idea and use clearer vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct statement about popularity, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words like 'however' or 'because'. Use correct nouns (e.g. 'electric bikes' or 'e-scooters') and avoid awkward phrases. Keep to two or three concise sentences.

Exemplo: Bikes in the traditional sense are not very popular in my country; however, electric bikes and e-scooters have become widespread. People prefer them because they are fast and convenient for short commutes, especially in crowded cities where distances are short.

× Yes I do only bike when I was a child and I riding it towards everywhere alongside with my friends.

✓ Yes, I only had a bike when I was a child, and I rode it everywhere with my friends.

Multiple problems: (5) Past tense issue — the student talks about childhood so past tense should be used ('had' not 'do', 'rode' not 'riding'). (26) Sentence structure errors — the original sentence is awkward and runs together; splitting it into two clauses improves clarity. (12) Incorrect use of pronouns — 'I do only bike' is ungrammatical; use 'I only had a bike'. (11) Incorrect use of prepositions — 'towards everywhere' is incorrect; use 'everywhere' or 'all over'. Specific suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs for past events, place modifiers like 'only' next to the verb or object they modify, and use simple prepositions like 'with' for companions.'

× It was happy time back then.

✓ Those were happy times back then.

(26) Sentence structure errors — the phrase is unidiomatic in English. (1) Singular and plural issue — 'time' should be plural ('times') when referring to a period with multiple occasions or a general period. Also use the demonstrative 'Those' to refer to plural 'times'. Specific suggestion: use 'Those were happy times' or 'It was a happy time' depending on whether you mean multiple occasions or a single period.'

× The situation speed of difficulty bike is not popular in my country, but the electronic bike which concluding the swift vehicles are super popular in the country for people to commute and to get to the point that it's not far from their home.

✓ Ordinary bikes are not very popular in my country, but electric bikes and other small fast vehicles are extremely popular for commuting because many people live close to work.

Multiple issues: (26) Sentence structure errors — the original sentence is unclear and contains several fused expressions. (13) Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs — 'situation speed of difficulty bike' is meaningless; use 'ordinary' or 'regular' bikes. (11) Incorrect use of prepositions — 'for people to commute and to get to the point that it's not far from their home' is awkward; simplify to 'for commuting because many people live close to work.' (22) Article errors — 'electronic bike' should be 'electric bikes' or 'an electric bike' depending on count. (1) Singular and plural issue — use plural when speaking generally ('bikes are'). Specific suggestions: choose clear nouns ('ordinary bikes', 'electric bikes'), use plural for general statements, and simplify clauses to explain reasons (e.g., 'because many people live close to work').