Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your tense consistent, use a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 1–4 sentences. For example, use past tense for past events, say the bike’s color and one memorable detail rather than repeating ‘bike’ and vague adjectives.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was bright red and had a small basket on the front, which made it easy to carry my books to school.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives reasons, but improve coherence and word choice. Use linking words correctly, avoid unnatural adverbs like ‘fortunately’ at the end, and add a brief specific example or statistic to strengthen the point. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than cars and easier to park. For short trips in cities, many people prefer bikes to avoid traffic; for example, about half of commuters in my town cycle to work on weekdays.

× Yes, I do have bike when I was a child and it was a red color bike with beautiful and manufactured structure of the bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was a red bike with a beautiful, well-made frame.

Error types: Past tense issue (ID 5) and Article errors (ID 22) and Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13). The student mixed present and past tense by saying 'I do have bike when I was a child'—the correct tense for a past situation is simple past: 'I had.' The noun 'bike' needs an article: 'a bike.' 'Red color bike' is redundant; use 'a red bike.' 'Beautiful and manufactured structure of the bike' is unidiomatic: use 'a beautiful, well-made frame' or 'a beautifully manufactured frame.' Improve by keeping tense consistent, using appropriate articles before singular countable nouns, and choosing natural adjective phrases.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars, so many people can afford to buy one.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars, so many people can afford to buy them.

Error types: Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Sentence structure errors (ID 26). The plural noun 'bikes' should be referred to with the plural pronoun 'them,' not the singular 'one.' Using 'one' implies a single bike per person but is less clear here; 'them' correctly refers back to the plural 'bikes.' Keep tense and agreement consistent.

× They are also convenient for short trips and help riders avoid heavy traffic, making daily commutes fortunately.

✓ They are also convenient for short trips and help riders avoid heavy traffic, which makes daily commutes easier.

Error types: Incorrect use of adverbs (ID 13 and ID 20) and Sentence structure errors (ID 26). The adverb 'fortunately' is misplaced and produces an awkward meaning. The clause 'making daily commutes fortunately' is ungrammatical. A clearer construction is 'which makes daily commutes easier' or 'making daily commutes more convenient.' This corrects adverb placement and improves clarity and fluency.