Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler phrases, and use linking words to organize ideas. Correct unclear expressions (e.g. “wanted to own a child” is incorrect) and keep to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief specific detail (when or how you are learning now) to make the answer more informative.

Exemplo: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. However, I became interested later and I have been taking lessons this year to learn to ride, which has helped me gain confidence.

Sugestão: Provide a focused topic sentence and use fewer hesitations. Organize supporting points with linking words (for example, because, therefore, as a result) and give specific examples or statistics if possible. Replace vague phrases ("limit out financial costs") with precise language. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cities are crowded and traffic is heavy. As a result, many delivery workers and commuters prefer bicycles or scooters since they are faster in dense traffic and much cheaper to run than cars.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents really didn't focus on me having a bike, nor owning nor practicing such activity.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn't focus on me having one, owning one, or practicing riding.

The sentence uses repetitive and awkward noun phrases ('a bike' repeated) and incorrect pronoun reference. Replacing repeated nouns with the pronoun 'one' makes the sentence natural. Also change 'nor owning nor practicing such activity' to parallel 'owning one, or practicing riding' for correct coordination and clarity. Suggestion: Use 'one' to avoid repetition and ensure parallel structure in lists.

× But of course I grew up and looked back to my childhood and wanted to own a child or at least know how to ride one.

✓ But of course I grew up, looked back on my childhood, and wanted to own a bike or at least know how to ride one.

The original has a serious word choice error: 'own a child' is incorrect and likely a slip for 'own a bike'. Also the phrasal verb is 'looked back on', not 'looked back to'. The sentence needed commas and parallel verbs: 'grew up, looked back on..., and wanted...'. Suggestion: Use correct phrasal verbs ('look back on') and check word choices carefully to avoid critical meaning errors.

× But I'm trying to improve.

✓ But I'm trying to learn now.

'Improve' is vague here; context implies learning to ride now. More appropriate present continuous verb 'learning' clarifies ongoing action. Grammatically 'I'm trying to improve' is not incorrect, but rewriting to 'I'm trying to learn now' fits the context and question tense better. Suggestion: Choose verbs that clearly match the intended action in present continuous.

× Oh, that's a really interesting question.

✓ Oh, that's a really interesting question.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change necessary. Included here for completeness. Suggestion: No action needed.

× Yes. Uh, bikes are really popular in my country, especially for methods of delivering, umm, many people depend on bikes because, uh, my country is so, uh, so traffic and has uh, many people in it, it's so crowded.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country, especially for deliveries; many people depend on bikes because there is heavy traffic and many people, so it is very crowded.

Multiple problems: 'methods of delivering' is awkward—'for deliveries' is natural. 'My country is so, uh, so traffic' is ungrammatical; use 'there is heavy traffic'. Combine clauses with punctuation; replace 'has many people in it' with 'many people' or 'is very crowded'. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases ('deliveries'), correct existence expressions ('there is heavy traffic'), and simplify redundant phrasing.

× So using bikes, uh, can limit out financial costs for fuel and et cetera as well.

✓ So using bikes can reduce financial costs for fuel and so on.

'Limit out' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'reduce'. 'Financial costs for fuel' is wordy; 'financial costs for fuel' can be simplified to 'costs for fuel'. 'Et cetera' in speech is better 'so on'. Suggestion: Use the appropriate verb ('reduce') and prefer concise phrases ('fuel costs' or 'costs for fuel').