Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and organize a clear, direct response. Start with a simple topic sentence (Yes/No and brief context), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct basic grammar (e.g., “my father told me”). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was eight because he wanted me to exercise and ride to school. I used it almost every day during the summer, and it helped me become more independent.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., “bikes are very popular,” “they are cheap and easy to buy,” “whole families can use them”). Use one linking word like because or for example. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers like “uh” or “umm.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to buy. For example, many families use bicycles for short trips to the market or park, and children often ride them to school.

× When I was a child, uh, I had a bike, umm, first of all, umm, uh, I don't have umm, bike, uh, but umm, uh, my father said me, if you could mark uh, in your exam, umm.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I don't have a bike now, but my father told me to try to get a good mark in my exams.

ID 26: The original contains several sentence-structure problems: run-on fragments, unnecessary fillers, and incorrect word order. 'I don't have umm, bike' lacks the article 'a'. 'My father said me' is incorrect verb-object usage; the correct verb is 'told' followed by an indirect object or 'told me that...'. 'If you could mark in your exam' is ungrammatical and unclear; intended meaning is likely encouragement to get good marks, so change to 'to try to get a good mark in my exams'. Remove fillers (uh, umm) and split into two clear sentences to match tense and meaning.

× When I was a child, uh, I had a bike, umm, first of all, umm, uh, I don't have umm, bike, uh, but umm, uh, my father said me, if you could mark uh, in your exam, umm.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I don't have a bike now, but my father told me to try to get a good mark in my exams.

ID 11: The phrase 'in your exam' is not the best preposition for the intended meaning; we use 'in my exams' or 'on my exams' less commonly. Also 'said me' is wrong usage rather than a preposition error, but correcting the sentence clarifies the proper prepositional phrase 'in my exams' and uses 'to' for the infinitive purpose ('told me to try').

× When I was a child, uh, I had a bike, umm, first of all, umm, uh, I don't have umm, bike, uh, but umm, uh, my father said me, if you could mark uh, in your exam, umm.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. I don't have a bike now, but my father told me to try to get a good mark in my exams.

ID 12: 'My father said me' uses 'said' with an indirect object incorrectly. The verb 'say' does not take an indirect object directly; use 'tell' with an indirect object ('told me') or 'said to me'. Changing to 'my father told me' corrects the pronoun usage and verb selection.

× Umm, I think, uh, parks is bike is, uh, very popular, uh, because it's very cheap and easier to buying, uh, and uh, all of family, uh, can be by that, uh, and.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in parks because they are cheap and easy to buy, and the whole family can use them.

ID 1: The original mixes singular and plural incorrectly: 'parks is bike is' is ungrammatical and 'all of family' should be 'the whole family' or 'all of the family'. Changing 'bike' to plural 'bikes' and using plural verbs 'are' corrects number agreement.

× Umm, I think, uh, parks is bike is, uh, very popular, uh, because it's very cheap and easier to buying, uh, and uh, all of family, uh, can be by that, uh, and.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in parks because they are cheap and easy to buy, and the whole family can use them.

ID 2: 'parks is' and the repeated 'is' are incorrect. When the subject is plural ('bikes' or 'parks'), use the plural verb 'are'. Also 'it's very cheap' should agree with plural 'they are' when referring to bikes. Correct subject-verb agreement fixes the third person singular issues.

× Umm, I think, uh, parks is bike is, uh, very popular, uh, because it's very cheap and easier to buying, uh, and uh, all of family, uh, can be by that, uh, and.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in parks because they are cheap and easy to buy, and the whole family can use them.

ID 8: 'easier to buying' incorrectly uses the gerund after 'to'. After 'to' when part of the infinitive marker in this pattern, the base verb should follow: 'easy to buy', not 'easy to buying'. Replace with 'easy to buy'.

× Umm, I think, uh, parks is bike is, uh, very popular, uh, because it's very cheap and easier to buying, uh, and uh, all of family, uh, can be by that, uh, and.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in parks because they are cheap and easy to buy, and the whole family can use them.

ID 11: 'can be by that' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'can use them' or 'can ride them'. Correct prepositional and verb choice clarifies meaning and makes the sentence natural.

× Umm, I think, uh, parks is bike is, uh, very popular, uh, because it's very cheap and easier to buying, uh, and uh, all of family, uh, can be by that, uh, and.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in parks because they are cheap and easy to buy, and the whole family can use them.

ID 12: 'it's very cheap' refers to bikes (plural), so the pronoun should be 'they' with 'are'. Also 'all of family' should be 'the whole family' or 'all of the family'. Fix pronouns to agree in number and use correct noun phrase for 'family'.