Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, use correct tense and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then give one or two brief supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unclear references (e.g., “both by my father's”).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a bike that my father bought for me, and I often rode it with friends after school. One memorable time we raced down a small hill and felt very excited, but we were careful and none of us got hurt.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clear time references and correct grammar. Begin with your opinion (e.g., “Yes, they are popular”), then give specific reasons and examples, using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid vague phrases and incorrect verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes have become very popular recently. During the COVID pandemic many people started cycling for exercise and to avoid public transport, so bike sales increased. For example, in Jakarta many residents cycle in the mornings to get fresh air and avoid traffic.

× When I was child, I have a bike and it's both by my father's, so I really like to bike the bicycles with my friends and there was a really exciting experience I ever did in my life.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that belonged to my father, so I really liked riding bicycles with my friends, and it was one of the most exciting experiences of my life.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (Grammar problem type ID 22 - Article errors), present tense 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'When I was a child' (ID 5 - Past tense issue), incorrect possessive phrasing 'it's both by my father's' should be 'that belonged to my father' (ID 11 - Incorrect use of prepositions and ID 12 - Incorrect use of pronouns/possessive), awkward verb choice 'bike the bicycles' should be 'riding bicycles' (ID 8 - Verb + -ing form), and wrong use of 'there was a really exciting experience I ever did' which is ungrammatical and tense/structure wrong; corrected to 'it was one of the most exciting experiences of my life' (ID 26 - Sentence structure errors and ID 5 - Past tense issue). Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past-time clauses, include necessary articles, use correct possessive or relative clause to show ownership, and use natural collocations like 'riding bicycles' and idiomatic expressions 'one of the most exciting experiences of my life'.

× I think back then when the COVID era, suddenly there's a some surge trend with the bikes and especially it happened.

✓ I think back then, during the COVID era, there was a sudden surge in the popularity of bikes, and it especially happened then.

Errors: time clause requires past tense 'during the COVID era' and 'there's' (there is) is present tense which should be past 'there was' (ID 6 - Present tense issue and ID 5 - Past tense issue), extra article 'a some' is incorrect (ID 14 - Incorrect use of quantifiers), awkward phrase 'surge trend with the bikes' should be 'surge in the popularity of bikes' (ID 13 - Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and ID 26 - Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference, use correct quantifiers ('a' or 'some', not both), and use natural collocations like 'surge in popularity'.

× It's all over the world and especially in Indonesia, Jakarta, people like to bike and they usually did the riding at the sun.

✓ It was all over the world, and especially in Jakarta, Indonesia, people like to cycle and they usually ride in the sun.

Issues: 'It's' (it is) should be past 'It was' to match previous past context (ID 6 - Present tense issue/ID 5 - Past tense issue), word order 'Indonesia, Jakarta' should be 'Jakarta, Indonesia' for correct place naming (ID 26 - Sentence structure errors), 'bike' as a verb is acceptable but 'cycle' or 'ride bikes' is more natural; 'they usually did the riding' uses past 'did' incorrectly with habitual present 'usually'—use present 'usually ride' (ID 5 - Past tense issue), and preposition 'at the sun' is incorrect; correct is 'in the sun' or 'under the sun' (ID 11 - Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use 'usually ride' for habitual actions, place location names in conventional order, and use correct prepositions like 'in' for being 'in the sun'.