Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변은 자연스럽고 이해하기 쉬우나 좀 더 구체적인 세부정보와 연결어를 사용하면 더 설득력 있는 답변이 됩니다. 예를 들어 언제쯤 탔는지(나이), 얼마나 자주 탔는지, 누구와 함께였는지, 그리고 그 기억이 왜 특별한지 등 구체적인 이유와 감정을 덧붙이세요. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 'because', 'so', 'when' 같은 연결어를 사용하면 답변 흐름이 좋아집니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember riding it around my apartment complex almost every weekend when I was about seven or eight, usually with my older sister. Because the area was safe and quiet, we would race each other and practice tricks, so those rides became one of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugestão: 의견은 분명하지만 문법과 표현을 다듬고 구체적인 근거를 추가하면 점수가 오릅니다. 먼저 'Hmm' 같은 말은 제거하고, 주제문을 바로 말한 뒤 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 예를 들어 통근문화, 인프라(자전거 도로 부족), 기후 등 구체적 근거를 들고 'however'나 'on the other hand' 같은 연결어로 대조를 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer buses, cars or the subway for commuting because public transport is convenient and there are few dedicated bike lanes. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people in big cities for short trips and leisure.

× I used to ride it around my apartment with my family and it was a good memory for me.

✓ I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my family, and it was a good memory for me.

'Apartment' refers to a single dwelling, so 'around my apartment' sounds odd for riding a bike; 'neighborhood' is more appropriate. This is a word choice issue affecting countable noun meaning; use the plural/collective sense when describing riding around an area. Suggestion: use 'neighborhood' or 'around the apartment complex' to convey the area where you rode.

× Hmm I think it's not that popular in my country because people usually take a bus or a car or subway and I don't see people they use bike a lot.

✓ Hmm I think bikes aren't that popular in my country because people usually take a bus, a car, or the subway, and I don't see people using bikes a lot.

Multiple present-tense and construction problems: use plural 'bikes' to match general statement, contract 'are not' to 'aren't' or use 'are not', include articles for 'the subway', and replace the redundant clause 'I don't see people they use bike a lot' with the gerund phrase 'I don't see people using bikes a lot'. This corrects subject-verb agreement, article use, and verb+ -ing structure. Suggestion: simplify to 'I think bikes aren't that popular... and I don't see many people using them.'