Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with accuracy and minor errors. Your answer is natural and descriptive, but contains a few grammar mistakes and one wrong word choice (“wrote” instead of “rode”), and it is slightly longer than necessary. To improve, correct the verb errors, tighten sentences to avoid redundancy, and use a linking phrase to connect ideas (e.g., “As a result,” “which helped me…”). Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “gained confidence” instead of “build confidence”) and keep within 3–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought for my seventh birthday. I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me a sense of freedom and, as a result, helped me gain confidence and balance when I finally removed the training wheels and rode on my own.

Sugestão: Your idea is relevant, but the sentence has grammatical errors, unclear phrasing and lacks specific supporting details. Improve by using clearer sentence structure, correct word choice (e.g., “rose” or “increased” instead of “hiked”), and add a specific reason or example (commuting, exercise, delivery riders). Use linking words like “because” or “so” properly and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes became more popular in my country, especially during the pandemic because public transport was less appealing and fuel prices increased. As a result, many people started cycling for short commutes and exercise, and bike sales and urban bike lanes rose noticeably.

× It was a small red bicycle, the training wheels that my parents bought for me on my 7th birthday.

✓ It was a small red bicycle with the training wheels that my parents bought for me on my 7th birthday.

The original sentence has a punctuation/structure problem: a comma splice and unclear relation between 'bicycle' and 'the training wheels'. Use 'with' to link the bicycle and its training wheels. Also replace the comma with 'with' to create a correct noun phrase. Suggestion: combine the ideas into one clause using 'with' to show possession or accompaniment.

× I love riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me a sense of freedom and helped me build confidence and balance, especially when I finally removed the training wheels and wrote on my own.

✓ I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me a sense of freedom and helped me build confidence and balance, especially when I finally removed the training wheels and rode on my own.

'Love' in a past context should be past tense 'loved' to match 'gave' and 'helped'. 'Wrote' is incorrect as it is the past tense of 'write'; the intended verb is 'ride', so use past tense 'rode'. Keep verb tenses consistent: use past tense for childhood events. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for actions that happened in the past and use correct verb forms ('ride' -> 'rode').

× I think bikes are popular in my country, especially when the pandemic hit and oil prices hiked, so it gave a sense that the people would use bikes to save more money than use.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, especially since the pandemic hit and oil prices rose, so people felt they would use bikes to save money.

There are several issues: 'when the pandemic hit' indicates past cause, so 'especially since' or 'after' is clearer. 'Hiked' is awkward; use 'rose' for prices. 'So it gave a sense that the people would use bikes to save more money than use' is ungrammatical and wordy. Replace with 'so people felt they would use bikes to save money' for clarity and correct pronoun use (remove 'the' before 'people'). Also maintain present opinion 'I think' while referencing past cause with 'since'. Suggestion: use 'since' to connect present opinion with a past event, use 'rose' for price increases, and simplify the result clause to 'people felt they would use bikes to save money.'