Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct vague phrase (“around a level”) and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle as a child. My parents bought it for my eighth birthday, and my father taught me to ride it in the park near our house. At first I was very nervous because I feared falling, but after a few practice sessions I became confident and rode around the neighborhood every weekend.

Sugestão: Good coherence and clear reason, but refine grammar and phrasing and add a specific example or brief comparison to strengthen your point. Use a linking phrase like “for example” or “for instance” to support your idea.

Exemplo: I wouldn't say bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, when I lived in Belarus I rarely saw cyclists because there are few bike lanes and safe parking spots. As a result, most people prefer public transport or private cars rather than cycling.

× My parents bought it for me when I was around a level and uh, I remember how my father taught me how to ride on it.

✓ My parents bought it for me when I was around a year old, and I remember how my father taught me to ride it.

The original sentence has two issues covered by the 'Past tense issue' label: incorrect or missing words that affect past-tense clarity. 'a level' is likely a miswording for 'a year old'. Also, 'taught me how to ride on it' is awkward: in English we say 'taught me to ride it' or 'taught me how to ride it'. Use 'taught me to ride it' for conciseness. Ensure past tense verbs remain consistent ('bought', 'remember', 'taught'). Suggestion: replace 'a level' with the intended age phrase and rephrase 'taught me how to ride on it' to 'taught me to ride it'.

× I remember that, uh, it was in the park near our house, uh, and it was really stressful for me as, uh, I was so afraid to fall off it.

✓ I remember that it was in the park near our house, and it was really stressful for me because I was so afraid of falling off.

The sentence uses past-tense memory correctly but has awkward wording and a minor prepositional error. 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. 'afraid to fall off it' is unnatural; the correct structure is 'afraid of falling off' (gerund after 'afraid of'). Also remove extra filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'afraid of falling off' and streamline conjunctions for fluency.

× I wouldn't say bikes are very popular in my country, as when I lived in Belarus I didn't see many cyclists.

✓ I wouldn't say bikes are very popular in my country; when I lived in Belarus, I didn't see many cyclists.

Tense usage is acceptable, but punctuation and sentence linking can be improved. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to join related clauses. This keeps tenses consistent: a present evaluation paired with past observation. Suggestion: use a semicolon or period and add a comma after 'Belarus' for clarity.

× I think that the main reason is underdeveloped urban cycling infrastructure, so people just prefer to use public transport or private cars to bicycles.

✓ I think that the main reason is underdeveloped urban cycling infrastructure, so people just prefer to use public transport or private cars rather than bicycles.

The phrase 'prefer to use public transport or private cars to bicycles' uses an incorrect preposition. Native usage is 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer X rather than Y'. Here, because the structure repeats 'use', it's clearer to say 'prefer to use public transport or private cars rather than bicycles'. Suggestion: replace 'to' with 'rather than' or rephrase to 'prefer X to Y' for correct comparison.