Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give one or two concise supporting details. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "fell off" not "dropped out") and avoid irrelevant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "but" or "so"). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. It was a small pink bike that I loved. However, I once fell off it and damaged it, so my dad threw it away. After that I mostly walked or used public transport.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and then add one specific supporting reason or example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and more precise vocabulary (e.g., "commuting", "recreation"). Keep sentences natural and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. Many people use them for short commutes to work or school because they are cheap and convenient. For example, I often see commuters and people cycling in parks for exercise on weekends.

× It was a pink color, but since I dropped out on the bike my dad threw out that.

✓ It was pink, but after I fell off the bike my dad threw it away.

The phrase 'a pink color' is wordy; use the adjective 'pink' directly (adjective use). 'Dropped out on the bike' is incorrect verb choice and preposition; the correct verb is 'fell off' for falling from a bike (verb and preposition use). 'Threw out that' has incorrect word order and demonstrative; use 'threw it away' (correct object pronoun and phrasal verb). Overall, simplify adjective use and use correct verbs and pronouns. Suggestion: use 'pink' for color description, 'fell off' to describe falling from something, and 'threw it away' as the phrasal verb meaning disposed of something.

× Yes, in my country people ride a bike when they have to go to somewhere or for just exercise.

✓ Yes, in my country people ride bikes when they have to go somewhere or just for exercise.

'Ride a bike' after 'people' causes a mismatch between plural subject and singular noun; use plural 'bikes' or use 'ride a bike' with 'someone' or 'a person'. 'Go to somewhere' is incorrect; use 'go somewhere' without 'to'. The phrase 'or for just exercise' has word order issues; use 'just for exercise' or 'just to exercise'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural nouns, omit unnecessary prepositions, and place 'just' before the phrase it modifies.